Hero Critique Thread (Because it's about damn time for this too!):
edited 2nd Nov '12 3:17:16 AM by MacNasty
edited 1st Nov '12 10:45:01 PM by FallenLegend
edited 1st Nov '12 10:39:02 PM by FallenLegend
edited 2nd Nov '12 9:09:54 AM by Dimanagul
edited 2nd Nov '12 1:45:44 PM by FallenLegend
edited 2nd Nov '12 2:36:27 PM by Masterofchaos
edited 2nd Nov '12 3:43:39 PM by Dimanagul
Name: Rachel Pahlke Age: 19 Personality: Rachel is mostly a nice person. She tends to worry a lot, but when the situation calls for it she can be surprisingly sane and rational. She has an odd liking for H.P. Lovecraft, and other works of the sort. Abilities: Pre-infection, Rachel's no more powerful then any other human. Even after she's completely infected and transformed, she still gets the short end of the stick as far as virus-granted abilities go. As an Infected, she's a little stronger than a normal human thanks to the P-virus's tendency to increase muscle mass and tone, as well as sporting a nice set of Wolverine Claws. Like all P-virus Infectees, she's also capable of spreading the virus through bodily fluids (e.g. saliva). Weaknesses: She cannot fight at all, despite being a P-virus infectee. Her infection also reduced her thumbs to vestigial stubs, so she's nowhere near as dexterous as a normal human and can be very clumsy in certain situations. She's also convinced that the P-virus is somewhat sentient and is trying to convince her to be a monster, when everyone else sees the virus for what it actually is. As previously mentioned, she tends to worry a lot, and due to her condition has a fair bit of trouble socializing. Goals: Survive the P-virus outbreak, and find a cure for her condition if that's possible. Motivation: Survival, a desire to return to some sort of normality. Role in the story: Rachel is the protagonist. Not the hero, but the protagonist. Backstory: Rachel had a fairly normal life up until the P-virus outbreak. Then her father, who previously was strict but still fairly kind, went bonkers and became a Crazy Survivalist. When Rachel becomes Infected, he tries to kill her, but she escapes from the house with some assistance from her mother. After running for some time, she finds a place to stop, and eventually is come upon by The Heroine, Selena Rogers, and her boyfriend Robert. Seeing no other recourse, the other two let her come along for the ride. Relevant Tropes: C & P'd from the CDT Characters Page, because I'm lazy (with some tropes added).
- Actual Pacifist: She detests violence, partly because she finds it repulsive and partly because, as an Infected, she believes that violence is a gateway to completely losing one's mind to the P-virus. It's sort of ironic, since the virus gave her a rather impressive set of claws that are just begging to be used for that purpose.
- Creepy Long Fingers: While her fingers are actually the same length as an uninfected human's, the fact that they're all tipped with 1 1/2 inch claws (besides her thumbs, which are vestigial stubs) definitely invokes the effect.
- Cute Zombie Girl: If one looks past her claws, anyway.
- Dying Like Animals: Is a mild example of a Rat. While she's obviously an Infected, she tries to hide it from normal people and will only admit to it if pressed/someone notices her traits that are obviously not normal and comments on them.
- Eerie Pale-Skinned Brunette: Her black hair is a result of her Japanese ancestry; her pale skin is a result of the P-virus.
- Fantastic Slur: "Zombie" is used as an insult to P-virus infectees who weren't mentally affected. Rachel isn't quite as insulted by the term as others of her kind are; actually, she isn't above using the term to refer to herself when speaking with people unfamiliar with the P-virus.
- Green Eyes: A very pale, sickly-looking shade of green - yet another oddity resulting from the P-virus.
- Natural Weapon: Her claws, not that she would actually use them as a weapon.
- Our Zombies Are Different: She's a 28 Days Later-style viral infected who, besides the obnoxiously large claws on her fingers and smaller claws on her toes, as well as the lack of thumbs, otherwise looks like a normal teenager who's rather sickly. She refers to herself and other zombies like her as "Infected," although she's not above calling the usual variety (or herself, for that matter) "zombies."
- Tainted Veins: Well, not "tainted" per say. More like "extremely visible veins," since the P-virus made her skin very pale. They're most noticeable around her wrists and ankles.
- Viral Transformation: What the P-virus did to her.
- Wolverine Claws: Her claws - each of them are an inch and a half in length and resemble a straightened version of an eagle's talons. She has a claw on each of her fingers apart from her (vestigial) thumbs. They aren't made of metal - rather, they're keratin based since they used to be her fingernails before Rachel was infected.
- Zombie Infectee: See Dying Like Animals.
Slowly walk away, to breathe again...On my own!
edited 2nd Nov '12 6:58:22 PM by Matrix
Name: Uly Coombs Age: 18 Personality: Not very tomboyish, despite her rather androgynous appearance (draft design◊ and outfit◊). She has interests in engineering and keeps her hair short (and held back with safety goggles) for that reason, but other than that her interests are as masculine/feminine as you'd expect from a woman of her age (reading romance novels being her main hobby, although she likes historical fiction too). She's rather prone to jumping to conclusions and not letting go of them until faced with overwhelming evidence. Her mother was a soldier, but she's far from a military brat; they moved once in her entire life Abilities: Quite well educated (about an A and B student by current standards), broad knowledge of technological matters. An implant she was given on being born prematurely (which releases several drugs and various chemicals) to prevent brain damage had the side effect of making her very good at understanding languages (and causing some of her naturally auburn hair to turn a deeper shade of rednote ) and she speaks quite a few. Proficient with her "solenoid pistol"; a small projectile weapon which uses magnets to fire steel bolts. Weaknesses: Prone to assumptions, lacks a thorough understanding of mechanics, so she can only cobble together the old machines she finds and discard broken components (hence she also can't repair the vehicle that crashed without the help of the driver who dies in the second act, naturally). She's also a deconstruction of the Badass Bookworm; apart from her pistol, she can't use any weapons (the player can draw a secondary weapon for a bit of extra firepower or a melee weapon to save ammo, but she's clumsy with both. Think along the lines of Shadow of the Colossus and how well Wander can use his bow compared to his sword) and isn't very athletic (she gets most of her exercise walking around a workshop), relying on the power of her salvaged technology to protect herself. Goals: To escape the ruins, reconcile with her family and get into university to study engineering (in that order). Whether she succeeds on the latter depends on the middle which in turn depends on how the player goes about the former (if the player explores enough she'll have an epiphany and make amends with her sister at the end, if not she'll be snubbed at the end, cross the Despair Event Horizon and give up). Motivation: She feels guilty about running away from her parents. Doubly so on her younger sister. Not dying in the middle of some ancient ruins would be nice, too. Role in the story: Uly's stranded in the middle of some 2200 era ruins after her ride crashes on the way to meet with her family (who she's been estranged from for the last 2 years after running away). Backstory: Born 2343 AD on the 19th of December to a salvage expert (father) and a soldier (mother)note at a research hospital that the former once worked at in a colony/country neither parent had citizenship in. She was born prematurely and given a brain implant to force parts of it to develop quickly in order to prevent brain damage, this had the side effect of causing some of her hair to be red(er) than the rest. She was discharged on February the 15th and considers this her actual birthday (on the basis she couldn't have survived prior to that point). Her younger sister was born in 2355 and looks up to her. 2 years prior to the game she ran away from home; She wanted to go on an archaeological dig to improve her chances of getting into university, her parents assumed she wanted to make a career out of it (she didn't) and tried to talk her out of it, since "salvage archaeology" was becoming unviable for someone her age to make a lifelong career out of. She got angry and just left after leaving a letter. Wanting to reconcile after the dig was complete, Coombs is stranded while travelling through the ruins to where her mother's old unit is stationed (they're expecting her; the guy in charge of the dig happened to be friends with the general, who in turn knew Uly as a child) in the hope of finding someone who can help her get back in contact. Unbeknown to her her sister's enlisted (following in their mother's footsteps) and already stationed there.. Relevant Tropes: Wrench Wench, Badass Bookworm (downplayed), Hollywood Cyborg (by virtue of a brain implant), Cunning Linguist, Gadgeteer Genius, Goggles Do Nothing (well they do, but she mostly wears them to keep her hair out of her eyes), Adventurer Archaeologist (neither of which she actually wants to be), Heart Container (various things which remind her of home give her a larger stamina bar, by virture of increasing her will to survive), Tomboy (downplayed; she only looks like one), Ambiguous Gender/Bifauxnen (not caring about this is where her tomboy status begins and ends).
edited 3rd Nov '12 9:05:32 AM by Bisected8
edited 21st May '14 2:46:24 PM by Eagal
- Cool Sword: Technically, he carries a collapsible high-frequency chokuto, but still . . .
- Drill Sergeant Nasty: Ask the people who've gone through his training if they'd rather A). Retake the course, or B). Crawl on their stomachs through broken glass in a desert. They'll hit the ground before you finish the question.
- Cold Sniper: Even though he's not actually a sniper, he has this attitude in battle.
- Berserk Button: Threaten a child in front of him, and you'll find out how many limbs you can lose before you black out and/or die.
- Badass Biker: Perry relies on a motorcycle for transport most of the time.
edited 11th Nov '12 1:18:58 PM by RedneckRocker
edited 21st Aug '14 10:51:35 AM by Eagal
edited 3rd Nov '12 6:33:06 PM by Masterofchaos