Nice use of details. It really gave an impression of what was happening.
I think the two girls with the signs of "Do Us" was over the top.
The crowd's reaction sent me into shock.
I haven't read the entire thing, so I may not have the best judgement. You do appear to be doing a good job; so, keep up the good work.
It comes. The corrupter comes.
Don't let it touch the tower lest all reality crumble.