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A Lone Wolf And A Lousy Day At School - A Mini Series:

 26 Schitzo, Tue, 13th Dec '11 12:35:45 PM from Akumajou Dracula Relationship Status: LA Woman, you're my woman
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My female extras and my female leads are worlds apart, AHR.

How should I tone them down? What was over the top? The flashing? the pro wrestling-esque poster sign?

And I think I like the idea of them being bizarre like minded background duos.
ALL CREATURE WILL DIE AND ALL THE THINGS WILL BE BROKEN. THAT'S THE LAW OF SAMURAI.
Nice use of details. It really gave an impression of what was happening.

I think the two girls with the signs of "Do Us" was over the top.

The crowd's reaction sent me into shock.

I haven't read the entire thing, so I may not have the best judgement. You do appear to be doing a good job; so, keep up the good work.
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 28 Schitzo, Tue, 13th Dec '11 10:57:15 PM from Akumajou Dracula Relationship Status: LA Woman, you're my woman
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I aim to keep either the "Do us" or the flasher. I won't take out both. If i have to take out one, which would it be?

What have and haven't you read, Philosopher? Tell me what your favorite parts were, tell me what else needed work. Specifics dood.

edited 17th Dec '11 1:21:14 PM by Schitzo

ALL CREATURE WILL DIE AND ALL THE THINGS WILL BE BROKEN. THAT'S THE LAW OF SAMURAI.
 29 Schitzo, Sat, 17th Dec '11 1:21:01 PM from Akumajou Dracula Relationship Status: LA Woman, you're my woman
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I've omitted the sign, since that seems to have taken some planning, which wouldn't make sense.

Any other thoughts?
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