I'm sorry to make two topics so fast, but I always wanted other people's opinion on this. its from nano wrimo last year.
For some reason there is an unspoken rule in my universe that if you happen to come into arm's reach, you have
to get into melee combat. It's from a slightly older version of my current work that was going to be a stand alone in the middle of a big time gap between two chapters.
Lastly, the context might help. The team needed to target a vehicle group for an A10 to napalm it. It worked, but Jason's best bud Logan was shot and dying. So with no immediate transport Jason has to go inside the inferno to get a working jeep so they can rescue him in time. He then has flash backs to his home city burning as everything in there burns, and goes nuts. They are somewhere in Florida (took the war to earth after pushing the bad guys off mars).
If you have gory combat to, please share them. We should all analyze gory combat together (in general). It is a fascinating subject.
Jason continued on with the carnage, taking it to another level. He quickly decapitated one man and killed another with a lethal strike to the chest with one swipe, pulled a pistol off one of their belts, and shot the only one not trying to run. With three left, he intentionally cut off one’s legs clean, and drove the blade straight through his back, piercing his heart. The next man he cut his hand clear off when he tried to shoot in one elegant stroke diagonally upwards, also mutilating his face with a huge gash. He reached his severed stump to his face, expecting his hand to be there to cover his face. Another strong strike downwards cut at his shoulder, but even this didn’t kill him. It only made the screaming worse. Where before he was minutes before merely leaving huge slashes in his ‘victims’, he was now slicing them into pieces. Small chunks of flesh and blood flew, and sprinkled the air in a red mist, now that the immediate heat was gone out of the area, if at all relatively. Jason pulled out his machete, pulling it towards him, making the cut more painful than deeper. The man fell on his knees, and cursed in another language. He was about to die, but it was not enough until he laid dead. Jason brought it up again, and plummeting it down into the same shoulder. It went deeper, now breaking right through the collar bone, and into his ribs, crushing his lung and heart.
Jason saw as the dying man’s mutilated and slashed face looked up at him. His left eye was completely destroyed, and his nose literally ripped open. His cheek had a long cut that almost went completely through. As the life faded from his left eye, Jason sharply pulled his blade out of him, and downwards, cutting in a curve, completely severing part of his torso and attached arm from the rest of his body.
Lovely, isn't it?
Anyone have any thoughts, and any of your own gory combat to share?
edited 25th Oct '11 11:45:24 PM by jasonwill2
as of the 2nd of Nov. has 6 weeks for a broken collar bone to heal and types 1 handed and slowly