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Is it clear what's going on?:

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1 KyleJacobs17th Oct 2011 02:12:11 AM from Connecticut/D.C.
Nice Guy
Hi, everyone. You may remember that a while back, I asked if the first page of my webcomic had crossed the line. Now, I'm back, asking if what's going on up to this point makes any sense at all.

Start here. I'm up to page 8. The most recent page is supposed to be a jarring shift, so I've got 2 questions. 1: Is what's going on in pages 1-7 clear? 2: Is what's going on in page 8 clear-ish (how it relates to what came before will be explained starting next week).

Thanks!
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2 jagillette17th Oct 2011 04:59:13 AM from the middle of nowhere
Wimpy Mc Squishy
Yeah, it's fairly clear up to this point. I did do a bit of a double-take on those last few panels, though. It seems to me that these pages are lacking cohesion; there's a clear central theme, but I don't know who any of the characters are yet. Granted, this is only 8 panels; I probably shouldn't nitpick.
3 KyleJacobs18th Oct 2011 10:19:41 AM from Connecticut/D.C.
Nice Guy
OK, thanks. The entire 8th page is supposed to be from the same guy's point of view as he's passing out, hence the eyelids and blur.
Read Remus! Has nothing to do with wolves.
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