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1 MrAHR30th Sep 2011 01:17:34 PM from ಠ_ಠ , Relationship Status: A cockroach, nothing can kill it.
Ahr river
Inspired by this podcast.

Basically, a good story is usually something with something familiar as a premise, and then a new twist.

Now, an example that doesn't work:

Familiar: A highschool student

Original: He fights demons.

An example that does work (used in the cast)

Familiar: There is a stargate-esque transporter that lets you travel anywhere

Original: It causes clones of people to be made, and someone is abusing it.


It's a simple writing exercise. Try it out.
2 chihuahua030th Sep 2011 02:03:53 PM from Standoff, USA , Relationship Status: I LOVE THIS DOCTOR!
Writer's Welcome Wagon
Familar: A high schooler follows another high schooler.

Original: That is psychic, while trying to find some control at the same time.

A little long, but you get the point.

edited 30th Sep '11 2:11:55 PM by chihuahua0

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Most times, when a chancellor is presented in fiction, productions like Star Wars make us expect that this chancellor is evil, right?

Familiar: A fantasy government has an 'evil' chancellor, and a 'heroic' figure trying to overthrow him.

Original: The story is told from the chancellor's point of view, and he is not presented in a particularly good or bad light.
4 MrAHR30th Sep 2011 02:26:05 PM from ಠ_ಠ , Relationship Status: A cockroach, nothing can kill it.
Ahr river
I am still having trouble coming up with anything remotely original that's in my story.

Ah well.
5 KSPAM30th Sep 2011 02:56:59 PM from PARTY ROCK , Relationship Status: Giving love a bad name
PARTY PARTY PARTY I WANNA HAVE A PARTY
Familiar: A shady government intiative creates a number of godlike superhumans that inevitably escape after the lab is destroyed in an "unfortunate accident".

Original: The test subjects don't hate their creators, instead viewing them as something between gods/parents. They only escape after the lab is shut down due to insufficient funding and they're dumped in max security prison for safekeeping.
I've got new mythological machinery, and very handsome supernatural scenery.

Goodfae: a mafia web serial
6 snowfoxofdeath30th Sep 2011 04:22:21 PM from San Francisco Suburb
Thou errant flap-dragon!
Familiar: Magic users declare war on humans for enslaving other magic users.

Original: The protagonists are slaves of the goddess of time, the Big Bad.
Rainbows hurt.
Familiar: A group of college kids buy their virgin buddy a hooker for the night.

Original: The hooker recognizes the special talents the guy has (not THOSE talents) and hires him to help her with realizing a dream she had.
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Familiar: A child is whisked away to a magical school because of his special abilities that let him have adventures.

Original: It turns out the school itself is controlled by dark eldritch abominations from the other side of reality manipulating the student body into ending the universe.
"Everyone wants an answer, don't they?... I hate things with answers." Grant Morrison
9 MajorTom1st Oct 2011 07:43:37 AM , Relationship Status: Barbecuing
Eye'm the cutest!
Familiar: A new coach joins his new high school football team and leads them through the next season...

Original: ...a season which will determine the fate of the Universe itself.
"Allah may guide their bullets, but Jesus helps those who aim down the sights."
10 annebeeche1st Oct 2011 07:46:47 AM from by the long tidal river
watching down on us
Familiar: It's another story about a clone army and the one dude that is lucky enough to escape clonedom, also it takes place in a shitty world that's been ruined by a poorly applied digital economy.
Original: A story is more than its premise or the sum of its parts. Seriously, there is a lot to this story, and the combination of all these elements plus how they interact

Familiar: It's Beowulf.
Original: It's an adorable effeminate Beowulf.

Familiar: It is a modern-day Red Riding Hood with werewolves. Original: Red's relationship with her grandmother is important in this story. Also it takes place in Quebec.

edited 1st Oct '11 7:55:33 AM by annebeeche

Banned entirely for telling FE that he was being rude and not contributing to the discussion. I shall watch down from the goon heavens.
11 USAF7131st Oct 2011 07:53:06 AM from the United States
12 SandJosieph1st Oct 2011 11:46:29 AM from Grand Galloping Galaday , Relationship Status: Brony
Bigonkers! is Magic
Familiar: One's a Cop, One's a Robber...

Hook: ...They settle down and open a bakery! D:
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13 Anthony_H1st Oct 2011 12:19:34 PM from monterrey, mex
...starring Adam Sandler?!
Familiar: A teen story about three friends suffering from being social outcasts, with negligect parents, drug abuse, gang violence...

Twist:...all Played for Laughs, and with a lot of spoofs and parodies in the mix
14 MrAHR1st Oct 2011 12:21:01 PM from ಠ_ಠ , Relationship Status: A cockroach, nothing can kill it.
Ahr river
I don't think everyone is understanding the premise here. Just because something supernatural happens, or something world-changing happens, does NOT mean it's remotely an "original" hook.
15 USAF7131st Oct 2011 01:15:21 PM from the United States
I changed accounts.
Who's doing it wrong?
I am now known as Flyboy.
16 OhSoIntoCats1st Oct 2011 01:22:54 PM from The Sand Wastes , Relationship Status: Showing feelings of an almost human nature
Premise: Earthling is obsessed with and searches for extraterrestrial life and finally finds some.

Twist: Said extraterrestrial life is just a plain old human from the future and the Earthling is a mind-raping Humanoid Abomination that's even more alien than the extraterrestrial, despite originating on Earth.
17 MrAHR1st Oct 2011 01:28:43 PM from ಠ_ಠ , Relationship Status: A cockroach, nothing can kill it.
Ahr river
USAF: I ain't naming names. That's rude. Some were doing it perfectly fine, just keep in mind what I said, and go crazy.
18 USAF7131st Oct 2011 01:29:42 PM from the United States
I changed accounts.
I'm not really sure what you're saying, so, an example would be nice. How about, did I do it wrong?
I am now known as Flyboy.
19 chihuahua01st Oct 2011 01:30:11 PM from Standoff, USA , Relationship Status: I LOVE THIS DOCTOR!
Writer's Welcome Wagon
Okay, I'll see if this is better. My upcoming NaNoWriMo project:

Familiar: A girl receives the power to see into the future.

New: She's blind.

edited 1st Oct '11 1:30:27 PM by chihuahua0

20 OhSoIntoCats1st Oct 2011 01:36:10 PM from The Sand Wastes , Relationship Status: Showing feelings of an almost human nature
[up] Sounds like it's been done.
21 USAF7131st Oct 2011 01:38:17 PM from the United States
I changed accounts.
I think that's a trope, actually...

edited 1st Oct '11 1:38:50 PM by USAF713

I am now known as Flyboy.
22 snowfoxofdeath1st Oct 2011 01:38:34 PM from San Francisco Suburb
Thou errant flap-dragon!
Blind Seers are common in Classical Mythology.

edited 1st Oct '11 1:39:34 PM by snowfoxofdeath

23 chihuahua01st Oct 2011 01:39:03 PM from Standoff, USA , Relationship Status: I LOVE THIS DOCTOR!
Writer's Welcome Wagon
Oh well. It's going to be YA anyways, and I hadn't encountered that concept in that field.

Oh, and she can only see people's deaths.

24 OhSoIntoCats1st Oct 2011 01:39:42 PM from The Sand Wastes , Relationship Status: Showing feelings of an almost human nature
Blind Seer.

Though, it would be interesting if she was just as blind during her visions as she was in normal life.
25 snowfoxofdeath1st Oct 2011 01:39:59 PM from San Francisco Suburb
Thou errant flap-dragon!
Just because it's not in the field doesn't make it original...

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