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Looking for feedback on a Doctor Who/Evangelion crossover fic:

Starts here:

One-liner: One day, fourteen-year-old Shinji Ikari meets a very odd man who calls himself the Doctor on the Tokyo-3 Loop Line. Unfortunately, there's something *else* on the train with them...

My first attempt at a prose story in years. Was trying to go for both Nightmare Fuel and Moment of Heartwarming; would like people's opinions on whether or not I made it work. Thanks for your time.
Updated the outline at the end. As I figure these are two fandoms without a whole lot of overlap... well, most conventions I've been to aside... I'm wondering if there's even an audience for this kind of thing. Leave a review if you're interested in where the story is going.
I'm not really a fan of either series, and I'm a lousy critic. So I can't help you with some things. tongue

However, I love a well - written crossover, so I read chapter 1 and it sure kept me glued to the page. Your spelling and grammar is excellent, and the description of the action is very well detailed. cool

 4 Riotous Rascal, Tue, 20th Sep '11 7:34:29 AM from AUSTRALIAAAAAAAAAAA
Well played, old chap!
I say it's badass. Ten (I assume this is Ten, right?) is perfectly in-character for how you'd imagine he'd act upon being introduced to the Eva-verse. It'll be fun to see how he deals with the Angels.
Did I ever tell you...the definition of insanity?
Yep. It's Ten.
 6 Riotous Rascal, Wed, 21st Sep '11 2:39:25 AM from AUSTRALIAAAAAAAAAAA
Well played, old chap!
Did I ever tell you...the definition of insanity?
Terracotta Soldier Man
Really clever. A bit of a slow start, but overall the writing seems pretty tight. It helps that this is the sort of off-the-wall concept I'm drawn to in fiction, whether it be fan or original.

 8 chihuahua 0, Fri, 23rd Sep '11 2:50:24 PM from Standoff, USA Relationship Status: I'm in love with my car
Writer's Welcome Wagon
I read only the first chapter, but it's interesting enough that I will find some time later to read it.

Shadowed Philosopher
I'm tempted to shout "BRILLIANT!" and wave my metaphorical arms around, but that's probably because I'm still on standards, where having consistently good grammar and punctuation, far from being a basic requirement, puts you in the top ten percent. Nonetheless, it's quite good. I know nothing about Doctor Who, nor do I know all that much about canon Evangelion; it's one of those series that I know entirely from fanfic. So I can't really comment on the characterizations of any of the characters, even the Eva ones, since most of the fanfic starts from completely throwing out Shinji's character, at least. I love the style and I really want to read more, so count your potential audience at at least one.

Edit: /checks story list
Ye gods, you must have started writing on about when it was founded. When was that, anyway?

edited 23rd Sep '11 11:08:56 PM by alethiophile

Shinigan (Naruto fanfic)
 10 Riotous Rascal, Sat, 24th Sep '11 7:44:30 AM from AUSTRALIAAAAAAAAAAA
Well played, old chap!
The late Triassic, I believe.
Did I ever tell you...the definition of insanity?
[up][up]According to The Other Wiki, 1998.

 12 Riotous Rascal, Sat, 24th Sep '11 10:46:35 PM from AUSTRALIAAAAAAAAAAA
Well played, old chap!
[up]There were dinosaurs in 1998, weren't there?
Did I ever tell you...the definition of insanity?
/* Ye gods, you must have started writing on about when it was founded. When was that, anyway? */

:) I'm far, far older than I'm really comfortable with. Let's just leave it at that.

Thank you all for reading. It's much appreciated.
Ehh, what the heck. Bump.
Shadowed Philosopher
Going back to do the subscribe thing, I notice that you have only a four-digit ID number. I'm tempted to bow.
Shinigan (Naruto fanfic)
[up][up] T-that's immoral!

Anyway, looks like I've got a lot of reading to do...
The system doesn't know you right now, so no post button for you.
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