Gay bacon stripsThat is a good idea. We can do it. In fact, I'll edit my first post for this. @nrjxll, Please stop twisting my intentions. I never meant for this to be about, "herp derp I write the best, " or anything like that.
Blurrggghh.You can't blame him; this would have turned to that direction soon enough.
Who you are does not matter.Sure we can blame him. It hadn't gone there yet, his comment was premature. However in general I think it's more or less futile to try and judge these in your own works.
"You never did understand that Lightning is a family. I thought you would have learned, when Duo hit you in the face."
I would argue that it went down that way from the moment someone first posted what they considered a crowning moment from their work. Ego-stroking doesn't have to involve saying "herp derp I can write the best" to be ego-stroking. The thread is now going down a more constructive path, so there's not much point in going back and forth over this. I just wanted to get my position across first.
Southern Style ScribeIn my WIP Redesigning Eva, I had this idea that the psychological wear and tear would reach a boiling point for poor Eva. The result is unpleasant and depressing, to say the least.
Nice GuyI'll edit mine for context.
Read Remus! Has nothing to do with wolves.
BFS EnthusiastMe too.
Spacefaring Wiki WalkerI can't think of any. Even if I did, I refuse to give myself the satisfaction.
Are you allowed to include upcoming scenes that you haven't written yet?
Rainbows hurt.Go for it.
(屮≖益≖)屮 彡 ┻━┻ F*ck yo' table; Go read my book! —> http://goo.gl/mtXkm
Okay, how do you get that text box effect? EDIT: Wait, dont worry, I worked it out
edited 16th Feb '12 2:15:36 AM by Lunacorva
Okay well this is a Crowning Moment of Funny I have planned for my Harry Potter fan fic: Harry Potter and the Mrymex Gate. Context: the first encounter between Sabyn (Male OC) and Voldemort Note: Sabyn is pronounced Sa-bihn ("Bihn" rhymes with "line")
"You know, " Sabyn sneered "I almost feel sorry for you. Because the fact is that you'll never be able to beat me." Voldemort's nostrils flared as his face briefly contorted with fury. Then the look was gone, replaced with a patronising smile. "Bold words Mudblood. Very bold, very foolish words. Do you truly believe that you stand even the slightest chance against a sorceror as powerful as I?" Sabyn replied with a cocky grin "Oh you're tough I'll grant you that, but you'll never be able to kill me." Voldemort chuckled "Reeeeaaaally? Well please, enlighten me. What is it that gives you such delusions of grandeur?" Sabyn smiled mysteriously. "You can not kill me. For I... AM A TOMATO!!!!! Silence fell. "What."
edited 16th Feb '12 2:38:31 AM by Lunacorva
In the spirit of pay-it-forward, a brief critique of the above! Really random, was my first impression. I mean, this Sabyn fellow clearly has at least a mouth, so he can sneer, grin, etc... I'm wondering in what sense he actually is a tomato. The non-sequitur kind of reminds of Yugioh The Abridged Series for some reason. And now, my own submission◊. This is more a "crowning moment of confusion" than anything. I thought it worth submitting because it's by far the most difficult text I've ever written. I estimate it took about six hours of repetitive trial-and-error to write this approximately 400-word portion, just because everything had to be lined up so precisely. Context: It's from a Pokemon fanfic entitled "Ash's Return", but there's not really much about Pokemon in this excerpt. The left column represents Misty and the right column represents Brock. Misty gets stuck in a reverse-time-stream due to some teleportation shenanigans.
edited 16th Feb '12 4:28:12 AM by Rvb39
Well played, old chap!Overly literal interpretation of Tomato Surprise?
Did I ever tell you...the definition of insanity?
Misunderstanding here, Sabyn is NOT actually a tomato, he just SAID he was in order to break the dark lords brain, hence Voldemort's dumbfounded expression.
Writer's Welcome WagonYou made me laugh with that line. It reminds me of "I...am a banana!"
Personally, It's not so much the line itself that I like so much as Voldemort's reaction
So awesome, it hurts!I'll admit, I thought the first three panels of my Christmas Carol parody◊ was a pretty funny gag.
edited 17th Feb '12 10:10:34 PM by NickTheSwing
My favorite moment from my unpublished graphic novel Sins Vs Virtues would be Envy's Heel-Face Turn during the final battle (you may see some Teen Titans influence in here): [Hex tries to keep fighting only to be blocked by Kindness, trying and failing adorably to look threatening] Hex: Ha! You? Heheh...this will be cake! [prepares to snap fingers] Kindness: Oh I'm not planning on fighting you. [bows respectfully] Thank you, though. Hex: Huh? Kindness: I just decided to seek help from a friend. Come on out Norbert. [Envy steps out of the shadows, grinning evilly at Hex] Hex: ENVY!? Y-you're with her!? YOU TRAITOR! Kindness: I have to go find my boyfriend now! See ya big bro! [high fives Envy and leaves Hex staring at Envy in shock] Envy: [shrugs] Nothing personal. [unceremoniously shoots Hex in the head] I lied. It's very personal. [hears gunfire in the background, smirks and runs off to join Diligence as she fires at Pride's mooks] Diligence: What are you doing here? Envy: Wrath's dead and the other sins treat me like crap. There's really nothing keeping me on their side anymore. Greed: [to Pride, sitting on his throne] Hey, Pride. It seems Envy has finally decided to show up. Pride: Envy? HEY ENVY! I KNEW YOU WERE STUPID BUT THIS!? YOU'RE SUPPOSED TO BE FIGHTING THE ENEMY! Envy: [shoots him, just barely missing him] I am fighting the enemy. I'm also partial to this: Diligence: [after shooting a mook in the head] Am I crazy or is this getting easier? Sue Perbia: You brats are not going to win agains-[gets hit by Temperance and Patience] Diligence: See what I mean? [Sue is sent flying into a giant water container. She looks up at the others, snarling in sheer fury, only for three gunshots to fire off panel. She looks up to see the water container gain several steadily growing cracks. The cracks get wider and water pours on top of her, washing her away; cuts to Envy, smirking as he points his gun at the water container] Envy: [sarcastically] Oops. Did I do that?
edited 3rd Mar '12 10:46:08 PM by CJCroen1393
The time is now,I understand the whole 'who is the author to say what is a CM, debate, but my friend who I use as a sounding board told me this was a C Mo Heartwarming/Cute (she didn't use those words, not being a troper). List of Characters here, but briefly Lucy has blindfolded Gabriel as they drove back from their first weekend away, where they finally did what they didn't do 25 years ago, and driven him to a surprise meeting. I take it we’re here? Is this the surprise?” “Six, actually. Don’t move, I’ll help you get out, and don’t even think of trying to peek!” She leant over and kissed him gently. “Promise?” “For you? Of course!” She climbed out of the car, closing the door. Suddenly Gabriel felt even more vulnerable, more alone. She seemed to be taking a hell of a time. Then there was the ‘click’ of his door opening. He felt for the seatbelt release, and he swung his legs out the car. As he lent forward, Gabriel felt a hand on his head. “Careful, dear.” Lucy whispered, as she helped guide him to a standing position, standing close to his left side. She took his left hand. “Take a step forward, it’s clear.” He heard the car door close, and then felt a presence on his right. Someone kissed him on the cheek, and someone different kissed him on the left cheek, then a third kiss, again on the right. There was a pause, and then a pair of small hands went past his ears, and held the back of his neck, their owner kissing his nose. He reached forward, and took the weight of the child onto his hip and right arm from whoever was holding her, and kissed back. “Hello Lottie!” he beamed. Lottie giggled. “How did you know it was me, Unky?” “Because you always give the best kisses.” He put his mouth next to Lottie’s ear. “Which one was mummy?” He whispered conspiratorially. “The third one. Auntie Charlie was the second, ” Lottie whispered a little too loudly to be private. “Ooo, Charlotte Gibson, you little tell-tale, ” laughed Charlie’s voice. “Was Betty the first one then?” he stage whispered, loud enough for the others to catch his voice. “Yes. She’s been excited all day, knowing you were coming.” “Charlotte!” That was Betty, no doubt mortified at having her teen-coolness questioned. “I didn’t know I was coming! I didn’t bring any presents. Sorry” “Don’t worry Unky. Mummy told me what was happening. You’ve brought a new girlfriend instead.” Lottie’s happy whispers still not as private as she thought they were, even though two people had scolded her. He laughed, and felt Lucy’s hand squeeze his in embarrassment. “Do you like her?” “She’s very pretty. Do you love her?” He heard laughter at the impertinent question delivered in such a serious whisper. “More than she can ever know. I think she’s too pretty for me.” Again Lucy’s hand tightened in his, and this time he squeezed back. Lottie leaned back and took the blindfold off, so she could look into his eyes. Her eight year old face was serious. “I think she likes what’s on the inside, Unky.”
edited 4th Mar '12 3:38:57 AM by LastHussar
Do the job in front of you.
Ahr riverI never crowned any characters :D
Diagonalizing The MatrixWell, then, I take it that for this thread to have any sort of positive purpose we need to step up and be critical of what people consider the best part of their writing. Hurray, not awkward at all... Okay, two points off the top of my head.
Pretentious quote || In-joke from fandom you've never heard of || Shameless self-promotion || Something weird you'll habituate to
If that's directed at me; 1. It's still a work in progress. I haven't started as a professional writer yet, and I'm still a long way from that. I have like five works that I'm thinking up and it's hard to keep track of just one. Additionally, the "silly gimmick" thing sounds a lot like an assumption because I never said anything about the actual plot. To be fair though, it's supposed to start out rather humorous, but it's supposed to get darker too, for example;
edited 4th Mar '12 12:57:51 PM by CJCroen1393
vilent walerMy main worry is that it has too much Black and White Morality, from what I've seen in those excerpts and from the description on the work's page.
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