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Does this Magic System sounds plausible enough?:

For God's sake, give him his briefcase back.
Yes, I know that this should go to World Building forum, but give me a break here, because I want more feedbacks.

I mentioned this earlier in other threads, but I want to make a story based on a society where magic and technology has coexisted since the ancient times and therefore magic is just another branch of physics. So I figured that I should make a magic system that is at least believable.

Since I'm not good at physics, I barely managed to pass that subject, for now I only have how mages gain their Eisen Steiner Particleorigin , aka Mana.

My verse is filled with energy, which is called the "Residue", because it originates from earth's environmental phenomena, like tectonic movements and weather. Every weather change creates energy, rain, earthquake, lightning, storm, volcano eruption, and such. For exam[le, you are more likely to succeed in casting magic in stormy day than very clear day. All mages have their element, Water, Fire, Earth, and Air, which is their affinity. Affinity is important in that if a mage are to gather energy, if he/she gathers "Residue" orignated from natural phenomena that has to do with their own element, for example Air element mage gathering energy from a tsunami (Too Soon?) and Fire element mage from volcano. Any mages above Level 0, can channel that energy into their body.

All living being in my verse has Sustainment Resource, aka soul. In my verse, everything, EVERYTHING, comes from the Origin and SR is an energy resided in physical body that operates it until either the energy runs out or the body is broken and cannot contain SR anymore. SR always emits Personal Aura, which fuels emotion, and mages can combine the PA and Residue and creates ESP, which they can use to perform magic.

The thing is that depends on person and their expertise in channeling and converting Residue and PA, the amount of ESP they can create varies. Some people are born with body that can create more ESP with same amounts while others are opposite. Another notable thing is that when you run out of immediate PA, you can break down your SR, which can create ten times more than average PA, but it means that you are reducing your lifespan. SR can never be replenished, ever, without using method that is prohibited in Berlin Sorcery Convention.

John Hansen, the hero of my story is a gifted ESP generator because he had a contact with the Origin due to accident and can perform large scale magic with much ease than usual.

That's what I have so far. What do you think, do you think this system is plausible enough?

edited 22nd May '11 9:58:12 PM by dRoy

...Goddamnit, why can't I get normal health questions like the rest of my colleagues? - Pyrite, upon being asked about the meaning of poop.
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I...

I tried reading that—namely, the the last half—several times...

And...if I had to take a quiz on this thing, open-notes, I would fail.

Erm. But what I can say is that from your first half alone the entire thing is completely implausible. If magic or residue or whatever is fueled by something unmeasurable, then it's already pretty unscientific. Really—how do you measure "weather change?" You measure things like change in position or velocity. Maybe wind velocity or temperature at the time? But..."weather"...isn't exactly something you can measure change of.

That aside, tapping into the thermal energy of a volcano or the kinetic energy of an earthquake via Hand Wave is much more plausible. I still have not a flipping clue what SP and SR and PA and whatever the hell the second half was going on about.

edited 22nd May '11 10:58:25 PM by Chubert

Whatcha gonna do, little buckaroo? | i be pimpin' madoka fics
For God's sake, give him his briefcase back.
[up] Hand Wave can just go to hell, I will make a Minovsky Particle. I'm just going to rework on it until it makes sense. Well, off to the class for now.

edited 22nd May '11 10:59:08 PM by dRoy

...Goddamnit, why can't I get normal health questions like the rest of my colleagues? - Pyrite, upon being asked about the meaning of poop.
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Sorry, it's probably because I don't really like magic being explained very much at all, so I'm overly critical whenever anybody tries.
Whatcha gonna do, little buckaroo? | i be pimpin' madoka fics
For God's sake, give him his briefcase back.
[up] Normally I would feel the same, but in my verse it's integral to technology itself and part of science. My story just wouldn't work without a Minovsky Particle.
...Goddamnit, why can't I get normal health questions like the rest of my colleagues? - Pyrite, upon being asked about the meaning of poop.
 6 feotakahari, Sun, 22nd May '11 11:26:38 PM from Looking out at the city
Fuzzy Orange Doomsayer
I'm not sure you ought to be using the word "magic" to describe the system you're talking about. It'll make people look down on your story, even if it's otherwise a well-written work. (This isn't a knock on the system itself, mind you.)

edited 22nd May '11 11:27:15 PM by feotakahari

That's Feo . . . He's a disgusting, mysoginistic, paedophilic asshat who moonlights as a shitty writer—Something Awful
For God's sake, give him his briefcase back.
[up] Yes, thank you for pointing out. I now have a terminology for Mana and now need one for magic. I'm currently thinking of Channeling. Any suggestion?
...Goddamnit, why can't I get normal health questions like the rest of my colleagues? - Pyrite, upon being asked about the meaning of poop.
Away on the wind~
Channeling?
There are too many toasters in my chimney!
For God's sake, give him his briefcase back.
[up]...Please don't tell me that's the name of the magic system in that series...
...Goddamnit, why can't I get normal health questions like the rest of my colleagues? - Pyrite, upon being asked about the meaning of poop.
Away on the wind~
Channeling.
There are too many toasters in my chimney!
For God's sake, give him his briefcase back.
Fuck. I hate looking for names...

edited 23rd May '11 1:49:26 AM by dRoy

...Goddamnit, why can't I get normal health questions like the rest of my colleagues? - Pyrite, upon being asked about the meaning of poop.
Away on the wind~
It's not the worst series to have your series associated with, but that association will be there.
There are too many toasters in my chimney!
For God's sake, give him his briefcase back.
[up] I don't even know what that series is about, although I heard about it here and there, other than it's supposed to be an epic fantasy. It's just that I think at least the magic system's name should be original.
...Goddamnit, why can't I get normal health questions like the rest of my colleagues? - Pyrite, upon being asked about the meaning of poop.
Away on the wind~
Try thinking of variations on words like 'casting'.
There are too many toasters in my chimney!
 15 Matrix, Mon, 23rd May '11 2:21:50 AM from The Matrix, Canada Relationship Status: Less than three
quidf scire vis?
Instead of using verbs like "cast" or "channel" how about, for example:

impel
actuate
drive
induce
stimulate

edited 23rd May '11 2:22:00 AM by Matrix

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