It's just a torture scene and I didn't find it very disturbing, tbh
If any question why we died/ Tell them, because our fathers lied -Rudyard Kipling
Alpha Legionnaire
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I know. It sounds almost like a scene from a torture porn. ![[lol]](https://static.tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pub/images/lol2v12_4863.png "[lol]"){kind=small}
its mostly that I don't know who the tortured person is. Why should I care about her?
edit: a question, how can I show someone (the first person narrator) realising that he's fucked but still trying to be optimistic and failing at that. The idea horrifies me.
edited 19th May '11 12:46:03 PM by honorius
If any question why we died/ Tell them, because our fathers lied -Rudyard Kipling
None of them are scary because contextless descriptions aren't scary. Do I win the prize?
Ahr river
Well, whether there is a context or not, what people find horrifying is subjective.
I think that this thread is just a lot of fun; it is interesting to see what people are thinking of and coming up with.
edited 19th May '11 4:25:33 PM by BetsyandtheFiveAvengers
Brony? Moi? surely you jest!
I'd like to know if people think mine
has the potential to be scary
Alpha Legionnaire
The real kicker would be if the little brother being eaten by said zombie turns out to be the protagonist's Xanatos Gambit by employing the "help" of an old zombified fried. Why? Being a douche is reason enough. 
*sings* "He's like any other who murdered a brother...".
edited 19th May '11 3:44:07 PM by AdeptusAlpharius
I ♥ the VRS
PARTY PARTY PARTY I WANNA HAVE A PARTY
Pobably the explanation of my Villain Protagonist's Freudian Excuse.
But it's not quite that simple. Once the novelty of the near future wears off, what next? You'll probably start to look farther. And oooooh, that's were it gets fun. Perhaps, in fifty years time, you'll have front row seats to the rise of the next great dictator, one which will instigate a campaign of ethnic cleansing on such a scale that the Holocaust starts to look like a child frying ants with a magnifying glass. Billions may die. And the best part? This future could have been kicked off by any number of seemingly innocuous everyday occurences, like a spilled cup of coffee. Thankfully for you, it can be changed just as easily.
That's when you start to wonder. What else could go wrong, what is going wrong, right this very minute? So you look farther. And the more you look, the bleaker it becomes. And it never stops. I've seen futures in which the human race is killed off by a race of intelligent spacefaring hamsters. Hamsters, Mr. Mc Lafferty. On some day, at some time, it will end. It always ends. In every future I've seen. It doesn't matter how, it doesn't matter when, it will happen. Just because you can see the future, Mr. Mc Lafferty, does not mean you can change it. If you seal up one crack, another is sure to appear.
So then you ask yourself that all important question. With your descendant's fate riding on something as trivial as a spilled cup of coffee or a wayward baseball, is it really worth it to care? If I decide to let the people of the future die in atomic fire, what of it? If I chose to save them, they'd just die another day. All the effort I spend giving a shit could be so much better utilized benefitting myself. What's the point of worrying myself about people whose deaths I can only prolong?
edited 19th May '11 5:21:20 PM by KSPAM
I've got new mythological machinery, and very handsome supernatural scenery. Goodfae: a mafia web serial
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I'm sorry, but first of all, it wasn't scary, not in a bad way; I was too busy being fascinated (can he see future?), and second, hamsters? Seriously?
Brony? Moi? surely you jest!
By hamsters, do you mean a whole race of Large Hams, or the animal?
He who fights bronies should see to itthat he himself does not become a brony. And if you gaze for long into an abyss, Pinkie Pie gazes Also
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I'm really hoping that it's the former...
PARTY PARTY PARTY I WANNA HAVE A PARTY
Hmmm, hamsters maybe not. That can be fixed in the final draft though. And yes, he can see the future.
edited 19th May '11 5:23:38 PM by KSPAM
I've got new mythological machinery, and very handsome supernatural scenery. Goodfae: a mafia web serial
The Odd Lad
I have a bit where one of the MC's has their gloves fused to their skin through massive heat.
Life's Gonna Suck When You Grow Up... But Is It That Great Now?... Also I'm Skylark2 now.
Need for Blood: -100,000
Erm, I need someone to tell me if my part (from the previous page) is scary enough. Thanks.
Professional Writer & Amateur Scholar
Ever watched Kara No Kyoukai, especially the last chapter? If you watched that one, your average cannibal scenes isn't enough to be scary. I don't find that one scary, simply because cannibla thing is actually my Author Appeal.
edited 19th May '11 8:09:10 PM by dRoy
I'm a (socialist) professional writer serializing a WWII alternate history webnovel.
PARTY PARTY PARTY I WANNA HAVE A PARTY
It depends on the execution. Lots of sound effects and vivid descriptions are necessary, as well as orgasmic facial expressions and chops-licking. Bonus points for implying that isn't the first time he's done something like that.
Professional Writer & Amateur Scholar
up] Cannibalism. Mmmmmm....crunchy.
edited 20th May '11 3:30:48 AM by dRoy
I'm a (socialist) professional writer serializing a WWII alternate history webnovel.
Apparition in the Woods
If you like cannibalism... Well, it's not really cannibalism, considering the primary actor, but I have plenty of that wonderful nastiness and so much more....
Mostly implied, though. Except when it isn't.
I like making people uncomfortable.
edited 20th May '11 4:52:41 AM by JHM
I'll hide your name inside a word and paint your eyes with false perception.
Professional Writer & Amateur Scholar
Give me a five, will ya?
Apparition in the Woods
*high-five*
I'm not generally a huge gore fanatic, but I feel that the proper application of any such visceral device, especially in a particularly emotional or tense frame of reference, can be really very effective.
In other words: If you can make it work, you should go for it; and if you're going for it, hold just enough back that it feels like you're holding back nothing.
edited 20th May '11 4:58:56 AM by JHM
I'll hide your name inside a word and paint your eyes with false perception.
Need for Blood: -100,000
The truth is, my target audience for that story are young girls (and who says young girls aren't brave enough for this sort of thing) and Periphery Demographic applies. And since High Octane Nightmare Fuel is considered a YMMV trope, well, who knows if my vague description of that part may scare some people reading it.
edited 20th May '11 5:13:12 AM by MrHollowRabbit
Apparition in the Woods
It's pretty ghoulish, I must say, but I feel that you could really drive home the point if the "snacking" in question were more casual...
I'll hide your name inside a word and paint your eyes with false perception.
Need for Blood: -100,000
I'm also going to describe how some of them will feel like throwing up upon seeing him ate the hand like nobody's business. After all, most people wouldn't have imagine themselves looking at someone being a humanitarian.
In a recent work I had written, a single father came back to the Inn he had been staying at to find his daughter dismembered.
He proceeds to haunt the place in various ways after his death. (Probably not that scary, but it's the scariest I've written.)
The only reason why I like waking up is because I like falling asleep.