Errr... Forgive me for bothering you, but I have a character I'm worried about being a Mary Sue
. I'm not giving a lot of detail on the plot, because I think the post is tl; dr enough as it is.
Her name is Luna, and she's a seventeen years old born in a fantasy world plagued by Fantastic Racism
towards mages. She's accepting of them, but believes she's the one wrong (this should clue you in about her true personality and Extreme Doormat
tendences, courtesy of her abysmal self-steem).
She gets adopted after biological parents die in a fire she (acidentaly) causes. The same fire badly scars the right side of her body. She's very self-concious about her scars, even though she does a good job in not showing. The incident pretty much killed her self-steem.
Her adoptive sisters, Lisette and Lorena eventually become famous and she's a bit worried about embarrassing them in public. She eventually decides being a warrior like Lorena, but doesn't know wheter she dislikes being in her shadows, or if she deserves it.
Quite smart and a fast learner when it comes to fighting, but sadly, a disaster when it comes to dancing, which leads to bad situations at balls, much to her annoyance. She doesn't even like balls, but believes she should because most girls her age do.
The eldest sister eventually teaches her to fight. Innitially, swordfighting, but since Luna is a bit of a geek who likes making things, I was thinking... Maybe her sister could have taught her how to shoot, and for all we know, Luna could create her own weapons?
She enjoys reading, specially scientific books, is fascinated with airships but is embarrassed of it because many people consider liking such things to be weird.
Acts cheerful even when she's not and tries to be perfect so people will like her. Many people can see through it and call her on it.
At the start of the story Luna herself to save one of her friends, the more self confident Lily from a bounty hunter (there are some people after Lily). Luna was supposed to have died doing so, but this doesn't happen because death gets kidnapped by some dead mage sick of the Fantastic Racism
Luna doesn't die, but doesn't survive either, forcing her to look for death if she has any intentions of either living or dying. But the mages' motivations doesn't really have anything to do with her.
She also has a dead friend in her backstory. It's thanks to this dead friend that she got to meet and befriend a mage who sometimes wants to strangle her because of her lack in self-steem. They eventually fall in love and hook up, but only after their character development. Said guy is a noble as fucked up as she is, but his coping strategy is different than hers.
During the course of the story, Luna is forced to realize death is a part of life, become more self confident and accept she can't be her sisters, or any of her friends.
edited 14th Mar '11 6:26:28 PM by risingdreams