Here's a thought: let's call this ended early, and make a quick summary about what we "learned" about our characters, what changes we'll make to them in their native works, and so forth.
needs work, as said. A lot of her character had to remain hidden to avoid spoilering my own work — she is a woman with many secrets. But I need to make it so she's an interesting character, and not just a boiler-plate Heroic Sociopath
she shows any of her cards. First impressions count, after all. If my readers don't care about Alice before, no amount of backstory revelations will amend that. I should have never split her up from Isaac — he serves as a necessary foil
. Without him or Sigmund, she really doesn't have a purpose. I'm fine with this, actually: it explains why she hangs out with them. Contrasting her with Gant and Vince's direct approach makes me think I should decrease her skill in combat, and differentiate her from the average Heroic Sociopath
by making her too physically weak and mentally unfocused to do well in one-on-one combat against anyone with even a basic level of combat training, forcing her to instead live by wits and stealth.
was too damn nice. His character is fine, it just didn't show up enough. Him turning a hut into a makeshift biochemical lab was unrealistic, but I worried in this thread, he was suffering a bad case of Can't Catch Up
. In retrospect, I should have let that happen; he is already supposed to be a bitter, jealous man, who hates anyone who succeeds without hard work, and I could have better explored how being surrounded by super-powered individuals would have magnified this character flaw. He was far too kind to Vince and Aleister, in particular. I suppose I could justify it as a rational decision to not piss off superpowered individuals, but even then, I should have hinted at his jealousy more consistently.
I created from scratch for this project, as a disposable mage. I'd intended for him to die and take down anyone stupid enough to sign his pact with him in a blaze of Karmic Death
. However, I will be using him in future as the previously-unnamed overseer of another of my villains. I liked writing a Chaotic Evil
character who wasn't Ax-Crazy
, but patient, intelligent, and manipulative. You don't see that enough.
are going to undergo quiet a rewrite as well. They'll be getting a bit more independence from their master, and shall go from being mere messengers to enemies in their own rights. Perhaps a few ancient ones will be developed into truly independent entities — we'll see.
The Eyes and Teeth
went very well, though it didn't appear much. Some time ago, I abandoned the idea of having it communicate with bizarre, Orz-like
speech in favor of having it communicate by burning images into people's minds, and I am quite glad I did this. Makes it more ominous.
edited 14th Mar '11 4:27:21 PM by KillerClowns