Once again, I'm sorry for bothering you. I don't want to come off as lazy, stupid or anything.
I need help with a short fantasy story of mine. It's set in a steampunkish fantasy world plagged by Fantastic Racism
against elementalists (because there were some very evil elementalists in the past). The story would be focused in the protagonist's interactions with his friends, and also, the discovery of a terrible secret.
The protagonist is an emotional sixteen years old noble named, who studies in an expensive boarding school overaseas.
His best friend (and also roomate) Leon
died of an illness one year ago. Shortly before falling ill, Simon befriended a girl
from another kingdom and the two promised exchanged letters. He died before he could answer the first letter she sent, though.
Leon began pretending to be his friend so the girl wouldn`t get upset, mainly because he never forgave himself for not being near his older sister when she died.
But the girl decides visiting Simon, and Leon's roomate (a mysterious Deadpan Snarker
named Julian) explains her what happened. After some talking, she and Julian start suspecting maybe Simon didn't fall ill at all.
The idea is that Simon got poisoned by one of the teachers by some reason having to do with the Fantastic Racism towards elementalists. A reason that kept Simon sympathetic. Maybe he was secretly an elementalist, maybe an elementalist killed him because he had found his secret out.
Or even, rather falling "falling ill" Simon had "an accident"(as in, someone kills him and makes it look like an accident).
I don't know why exactly Simon could have been poisoned, and I would like some help with that. Please, thanks and forgive me for bothering you.
edited 11th Feb '11 3:29:18 PM by risingdreamer
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