For a new Fanfic I am writing, I am trying to come up with a character who starts out as The Ace / Parody Sue, and then slowly becomes a Broken Ace that finds he is quickly losing friends to war.

The setting is Code Geass, and is tied in with the last one I started writing.

The character is Bezide Ascato, a guy who is stated to be the clone of the Big Bad, has no clone degeneration, is a very pretty, handsome young man, has pure Blue Eyes, and is...well, oddly for a Bishonen, very buffed out.

He is a super soldier stated to be good at mostly everything, except speaking Esperanto. Insofar, he has utterly wasted two characters at once in his first fight ever, and curbstomped their mooks.

I am just concerned I might have made him too sueish. What should I do?

edited 5th Feb '11 10:48:43 PM by NickTheSwing

Considering the setting, no, not too sue-ish.

ah, alright, thanks.

Any other advice on this character?

I don't have any advice, but I'll echo Edmania's opinion on the character not being a mgary sue.

that's acutally a good point: in a seires like Geass, the real power goes to the plotters and not the fighters. so he's proably not a sue, but is edging to it.