My writeup has been edited, and hopefully made better. Hopefully.
Thank you for rereading! I'm still an amateur at writing, especially when it comes to dialog, so it's nice to hear that I'm getting at least a little better. ^__^
edited 29th Aug '11 7:21:05 AM by Pulse
I sure said that!I liked that write up, I really did. The only problem was that it does fall into the same problem that asterism's did: in a mostly dialouge write up with 3+ speakers, it can get kinda confusing as to who is saying what, though rereading it, you managed to fix some of this in editing.
But aside from that, good job! I liked the character interaction you had going these. Also, I do wonder what kind of slow news day it is if Aya is reporting on those head creatures.
edited 29th Aug '11 7:12:44 AM by Otherarrow
Don't PM me. We don't like being PMed.Any write up with the Prismrivers (and, for that matter, the three fairies) will have that problem, unless you proceed avery comment with Lunasa:, Merlin: and Lyrica:
Heart of StoneThe Prismrivers meeting Kyouko is a thing that is good and that I enjoyed.
Phantom Ensemble is a ZUN cover of a Prismrivers song. Yukari brought him to a concert once, clearly. The original version had more castanets.
KILL THEM WITH FIRE.
edited 29th Aug '11 8:00:36 AM by Bocaj
Forever liveblogging the AvengersSpeaking of castanets, which Prismriver plays percussion?
Heart of StoneLyrica, I believe
"Seriously, don't eat the mermaid. And not just because it's half cannibalism." ~Otherarrowyea im with bocaj on that one, those things are an abomination.
Just another passerbySame here. They creep me right the hell out.
But I needed an absurd, roundabout story written by Ayayayayayayayaya.
edited 29th Aug '11 11:07:40 AM by Pulse
I sure said that!Abomination maybe* , but not newsworthy. Aya must have been really desperate for news.
Also, the thought of jazz Prismrivers makes me want to hear a jazz remix of their theme. Can it be done?
Don't PM me. We don't like being PMed.Maybe. If the fighting games are any indication, the real jazz fan is Alice.
Heart of StoneThe Prismrivers Three
"Lunasaaaaaa."
"..."
"Lunasa I'm booooored!"
"Go practice your saxaphone, then. You've said that you've been getting rusty with it."
"Then practice with me! It's boring when I do it by myself."
"Merlin, I can't. I'm writing our next song."
"Whyyyyyyy? Just do what we always do! Improv, improv!"
"Merlin, I-"
"Hey guys! Sorry I'm late to my own meeting!"
"For like, the sixth time."
"Shut up."
"Hiya, Lyrica!"
"Hi. Anyways let's get down to business. Lately, we've been getting progressively less and less atendees to our concerts. And that's no good."
"Whaaaaat?! I never noticed that!"
"Because you're too busy tooting your own horn. But yes, I have noticed this as well."
"So..."
"So...?"
"So!"
"Lyrica, was there any point to this meeting other than to confirm that we are becoming less popular?"
"I was kinda hoping you had an idea, sis!"
"Why do I have to be the one to think of everything? You're lucky that I do, in fact, have an idea."
"I knew I could count on you, Lunasa!"
"You're the best!"
"Don't thank me until you've seen what I've implimented." Knock knock! "Ah, there she is now."
"Eh...?"
"Come on in, the door's open!"
"Ah, hello Prismrivers."
"What the hell! Lunasa, why is she here?!"
"I don't see a problem. Mystia is a very popular and famous singer. If she sings in our concert, we'll surely become popular again."
"But she's competition!"
"Think of this like a temporary business merge. Unwanted, but necessarry."
"I don't know what that means, but I don't like it."
"It means deal with it. Come on, I finished a new song and we need to practice it."
"This isn't over! Not by a longshot!"
"..."
"Umm...Miss Lorelai?
"Oh, uh yes?"
"I really like your singing! Can I have an autograph?"
"Sure thing!"
edited 29th Aug '11 11:30:38 AM by Metaflare
"Seriously, don't eat the mermaid. And not just because it's half cannibalism." ~OtherarrowColour? You're a genius, Metaflare. And of course, by extension, so am I.
Heart of StoneIt would make sense that Merlin would like Mystia's singing.
It sounds up Merlin's alley.
Forever liveblogging the AvengersI so totally planned that
"Seriously, don't eat the mermaid. And not just because it's half cannibalism." ~OtherarrowI don't think Phantom Ensemble has the right rhythm for jazz.
Heart of StoneDidn't stop whoever turned Dollmaker of Bucuresti into jazz in SWR
"Seriously, don't eat the mermaid. And not just because it's half cannibalism." ~OtherarrowNOOOOOO, MY WORDS! I MUST DEVOUR THEM!
They taste so bitter...
Catchy, though. Jazz is such a fun genre.
edited 29th Aug '11 11:53:00 AM by asterism
Heart of StoneJazz is the best genre, which is why Merlin is the best sister
"Seriously, don't eat the mermaid. And not just because it's half cannibalism." ~OtherarrowAs if. Haven't you ever heard of jazz piano? Or jazz violin?
Everyone knows that Lunasa is the most awesome Prismriver. You can't play an Irish Jig on a trumpet.
edited 29th Aug '11 1:40:17 PM by asterism
Heart of StoneBut she's such a downer, brings such bad publicity to the strings.
Anyway, Lyrica does all the work in the recordings, everyone knows that.
I have no horse, and I must ride. I accomplish unlockments.My god Metaflare, why are you such a smart wizard!?
Lunasa might get certain teenagers interested, and if she doesn't play for too long, a closing solo from her could easily prevent an exiting crowd from becoming a riot.
I sure said that!Actually, if you think about it, the effects of the elder two Prismrivers' music could be compared to drugs. Merlin is a stimulant and Lunasa is a depressant.
And she's not a comedown. There are good kinds of sadness, such as nostalgia. I can't find a name for the kind of sadness that warms the soul, but that's one as well. YOU HAVE FAILED ME AGAIN, ENGLISH!
Heart of StoneI was talking about her personality. Her music can't be that depressing, or she wouldn't have a fan club.
I have no horse, and I must ride. I accomplish unlockments.
Someone else was asking earlier if the Flower View version of Phantom Ensemble was different from the PCB one. It is, it's slightly lower. And how did I find out? By playing both songs at the same time. Awesome dissonance.
Incidentally, if you are a fan of dissonance, play both versions of Charming Domination at the same time. Then buy new ears.
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