Anywho, will get those other 4 strips out of the way to make a nice clean number, and might tackle another ten later. Maybe. Prolly not. Lying through my teeth.
- This is new. Instead of oddly for fitting clothes that haunts the strip to this day, we see Sarah's shirt is a bit too big for her!
- Look at Sarah's hand. It looks like someone flattened it with a meat hammer.
- Stare at that last panel. Stare at it. You're not staring! STARE AT IT DAMN IT! Now, look at the papers in the panel. Look at how they seem to become mere scribbles near Tedd. Now scoff at Shive's messiness. Scoff at it!
- 2002 has never heard of the USB stick, it seems. Or any sort of computer stored information. To be fair, I am sure that Verres has been collecting these since the 1960s, but you still have to wonder why he he's allowed to have THAT many papers and be THAT disorganized. Doesn't the gov't work on a need to know basis?
- The 'did I scare them away?' schtick ain't over yet. Shive is gonna milk this sympathy cow for all it's worth. And if there ain't someone who would be logically suspicious and untrusting of Grace, dagnabbit, Shive will derail someone to get it!
- Hands are bad, lack of backgrounds makes me rage. Nothing too out of the ordinary here. Just par for course badness.
- Sarah, she SAVED you from a MUGGER. Don't you think you might have OTHER reasons for thinking she is not a monster?
- Although, 'seen it before meh' is not that bad of an excuse, I guess...
- Once again, you get your good ol angstiness of angst for being different. Here's a tip to any writers who want to do this:
- Ever read Series Of Unfortunate Events? Namely the one with the Carnival? No? Well, basically in it, there is a troupe of freaks. One of them is ambidextrous, which basically means he can use both hands equally. He does nothing but ANGST about how HORRIBLE and FREAKY he is for being able to do this. Now, this is obviously played for laughs, but wanna know the sad part? He is STILL better done than Grace.
- See, Mr. Amby still had one thing that Grace didn't. Honest to goodness retribution. His boss treated him like a freak, the carnival audience treated him like a freak.
- The point I am trying to make here is that unless you're willing to show people (Not just straw men mind you —which Series of Unfortunate events does and gets away with due to not being entirely serious—, perfectly normal decent people) acting like they are some horrible freak of nature, DON'T MAKE YOUR CHARACTERS ANGST LIKE THIS.
- I don't CARE if they had some traumatic childhood because of their ability. That is NOT your 'showing people being mean to the character' get out of jail free card! Here's another thing, angsty childhood backstories don't mean SHIT unless they are involved in the plot. What I mean by that is,
- ONE, character development FIRST, angsty backstory SIXTH
- TWO, unless that backstory is going to have repercussions on the current story line (say, blast from the past), it's best to not feature it center stage. You should still let it be mentioned, foreshadowed and all of that jazz, but don't make it the sole defining trait of the character or some great eternal mystery alluded to every couple of pages.
- THREE, not everyone's backstory is going to be important. Yes, it's part of them, but is it REALLY needed for the plot? Character development needs a full backstory to work off of, but we don't need to see the development happening right in front of us in real time. That's why nobody likes wangsting! So you HAVE a character that thinks she's a freak because her mother beat her or whatever. Let her come to terms with that through her REACTIONS. Let her change so subtly that first reading through, you might not have even noticed. Make it so that it's so blindingly OBVIOUS of what she was going through, but so completely SUBTLE that the only way to see how 'obvious' it is, is to know that fact before hand!
- ...sorry. My point still stands, however.
- Shive is doing the 'arms follow the waist' figure in the last panel for Sarah (albeit only slightly). Anyone who can draw should know you should never do such a thing. Ever.
- Once again, Shive can not draw waists.
- You know, other than the whole 'noodle incident chain jerk' thing going on, you could take this strip out and not even miss anything of importance.
- Shive has been spending time learning poses, it seems. I have no REAL complaints about it, other than it is quite the clichéd pose, but I do wonder how many times he drew that to get it right.
- Tedd's house is very bare. Their living room consists of nothing but white walls and a couch. The mother took everything when she left, you see...
- Remember that whole 'derailing a character' thing I mention in strip 47? Here we go. Wheeeh. Why Elliot? Because Tedd is omg teh LURVE, Verres would have never let her in if he was suspicious and Sarah...well, Sarah is the only other girl you see. And her being suspicious would be very bad.
- We know why Grace came here. She's bat shit scared of her family. We know she's dangerous. She was bred as a killing machine. What the hell is Elliot getting at?
- Now, WE know the reason she knew of Tedd. The goo. Elliot, however, does not. Still though, this takes a LOT of 'Elliot-cred' away. Foresight is a bitch, but that's what happens.
Next time we wrap up the Shade arc and dive into a new arc called 'Relations!'
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