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20th May '15 1:30:50 PM EnjolrasAmy
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Added a very brief summery of the overarching theme of my novel, and a request to critique a scene that I am worried will be read the wrong way.
* PrometheusCreations: "Zeitgeist" - WIP of almost finished twelve page comic story.
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* PrometheusCreations: "Zeitgeist" - WIP of almost finished twelve page comic story.story. * EnjolrasAmy: Currently untitled work, which I've started writing in the middle because of the detail needed in some of the early stages that I am still working out in my head. It's pretty much the story of Marianne, a French girl, who fights against authority, wanting to escape the hand of fate, who joins her brother in a revolution. I appreciate it's slightly like Les Miserables in some respects, but there's one particular scene I want to run past some critics, as I am unsure if it could be seen as incest, or if it simply implies the closeness of the brother and sister in an emotional setting. I intend it to show how close Marianne and Bastian are, but worry it could be read as incest.
7th Aug '14 5:41:18 PM PrometheusCreations
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I wish to have some feedback over this story.
* Candle "Will you be there"
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* Candle "Will you be there"there" * PrometheusCreations: "Zeitgeist" - WIP of almost finished twelve page comic story.
24th Apr '14 1:46:35 AM MorwenEdhelwen
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* MorwenEdhelwen: ''Cuba Libre''.
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* MorwenEdhelwen: ''Cuba Libre''.Libre'' and/or ''Isaholmi Spar''.
5th Apr '14 10:22:44 AM CrystalGlacia
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My turn's been over for a while.
* Crystal Glacia: ''Adamantine'', prologue/chapter 1
26th Mar '14 5:25:45 PM MorwenEdhelwen
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* MorwenEdhelwen: ''Cuba Libre".
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* MorwenEdhelwen: ''Cuba Libre".Libre''.
26th Mar '14 5:25:29 PM MorwenEdhelwen
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* MorwenEdhelwen: ''Issheim Spar'' (Fantasy novel)
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* MorwenEdhelwen: ''Issheim Spar'' (Fantasy novel)''Cuba Libre".
31st Jan '14 9:26:29 PM candle
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* Kesar: ''Happy Go Lucky''- Chapters one and possibly two- comic book script.
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* Kesar: ''Happy Go Lucky''- Chapters one and possibly two- comic book script.script. * Candle "Will you be there"
31st Jan '14 9:08:31 PM CrystalGlacia
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Deleting the entries of people who have already gone.
* Jabrosky - ''Sekhotep and the Key to Heaven'': Chapter One * LittleBillyHaggardy - ''Sachrimnir'': Stand alone story. * Erock: Start of a big, untitled novel * Frogger5 ''Across the Towering Borders'' * Snowy Foxes: ''The Fifth City:'' Chapter One * LockedBox: ''Mix Beer With Liquor And You Will Get Sicker'' chapters six and/or seven depending on progress
23rd Jan '14 5:46:41 PM MorwenEdhelwen
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* MorwenEdhelwen: ''Issheim Spar'' (eventually. Fantasy novel)
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* MorwenEdhelwen: ''Issheim Spar'' (eventually. Fantasy (Fantasy novel)
23rd Jan '14 5:46:23 PM MorwenEdhelwen
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* MorwenEdhelwen: ''Issenheim Spar'' (eventually. Fantasy novel)
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* MorwenEdhelwen: ''Issenheim ''Issheim Spar'' (eventually. Fantasy novel)
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