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** His older, yet more immature [[TheIdiotFromOsaka Kansai dialect-speaking]] sister Akira tells this to the elves while also {{Flipping the bird}}s:
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** His [[ChildishOlderSibling older, yet more immature immature]] and [[TheIdiotFromOsaka Kansai dialect-speaking]] sister Akira tells this to the elves while also {{Flipping the bird}}s:
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** Avaril is an UglyAmericanStereotype, if we change "devotion to EagleLand" with "devotion to the land of TheFairFolk", but otherwise is exactly the same ("[[RememberTheAlamo remember]] the [[Franchise/TolkiensLegendarium First Kinslaying]]!").
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** His Kansai dialect-speaking sister [[TheIdiotFromOsaka Akira]] tells this to the elves while also {{Flipping the bird}}s:
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** His Kansai dialect-speaking sister older, yet more immature [[TheIdiotFromOsaka Akira]] Kansai dialect-speaking]] sister Akira tells this to the elves while also {{Flipping the bird}}s:
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--->'''Senko''': [[OhCrap Akira nee-san, no, stop!]] Urgh... [[ThisIsGonnaSuck This is not ending well...]]
--->'''Avaril''': [[DeadpanSnarker And here I thought Oni were supposed to be smart...]]
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--->'''Senko''': [[OhCrap Oh no! Akira nee-san, no, don't, stop!]] Urgh... [[ThisIsGonnaSuck This is not ending well...]]
--->'''Avaril''': [[DeadpanSnarker Hahaha! And here I thought Oni were supposed to be smart...]]
--->'''Avaril''': [[DeadpanSnarker Hahaha! And here I thought Oni were supposed to be smart...]]
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** Elves are far and away the best species ... at gardening. Avaril can't help but lecture his somewhat botanically ignorant companions about how those are ''hydrangeas'', not hibiscus, and explain the proper way to maintain strawberry patches. Kate and George never comment because everyone ''but'' the elves realizes that the topic isn't that important in the grand scheme of things.
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** Elves are far and away the best species ... at gardening. Avaril can't help but lecture his somewhat botanically ignorant companions about how those are ''hydrangeas'', not hibiscus, and explain the proper way to maintain strawberry patches. Kate and George never comment because everyone ''but'' the elves realizes that [[SkewedPriorities the topic isn't that important in the grand scheme of things.things]].
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** Every time Avaril calls out human ineptitude, Kate experiences ShamefulShrinking. He criticises humans so often and so harshly that by the end of the story, she's smaller than a flea.
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** Every time Avaril calls out human ineptitude, deficiencies of any kind, Kate experiences ShamefulShrinking. He criticises humans so often and so harshly that by the end of the story, she's smaller than a flea.too small to be seen with the naked eye. Avaril doesn't even notice where she's gone until George tells him what he did to her and that she's probably dead thanks to him.
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* '''Averted''': Avaril and his fellow elves are roughly equal to the other races in the world and act as such.
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* '''Averted''': '''Averted''':
** Avaril and his fellow elves are roughly equal to the other races in the world and act assuch.such.
** All members of the party are the same species and come from the same culture.
** Avaril and his fellow elves are roughly equal to the other races in the world and act as
** All members of the party are the same species and come from the same culture.
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--->'''Senko''': [[OhCrap Akira nee-san, no, stop!]] Argh... [[ThisIsGonnaSuck It was worth an attempt...]]
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--->'''Senko''': [[OhCrap Akira nee-san, no, stop!]] Argh... Urgh... [[ThisIsGonnaSuck It was worth an attempt...This is not ending well...]]
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** Elves are the oldest race around, and ''most'' elves will admit the reason they're better than everybody is because they had been there, done that, and survived to wear the T-shirt out long ago ... and everybody knows it. Either Kate and George know Avaril is normal for elves willing to go adventuring--and they do want to benefit from the lessons the elves learned--or are aware that, actually, Avaril is [[BlueAndOrangeMorality by elven standards]] treating them like fellow elves.
** Elves just made FirstContact with other races a little while ago. Avaril isn't prepared for the comparative BlueAndOrangeMorality of his human companions, so of course he thinks poorly of them compared to the only culture he's known for most of his life. Kate and George let it go because they know that Avaril [[UndyingLoyalty would die for them if need be]] and he doesn't ''actually'' think that humans are weak, just bizarre, and he'll eventually get over it when he gets more used to elven culture not being the only way to do things.
** Elves just made FirstContact with other races a little while ago. Avaril isn't prepared for the comparative BlueAndOrangeMorality of his human companions, so of course he thinks poorly of them compared to the only culture he's known for most of his life. Kate and George let it go because they know that Avaril [[UndyingLoyalty would die for them if need be]] and he doesn't ''actually'' think that humans are weak, just bizarre, and he'll eventually get over it when he gets more used to elven culture not being the only way to do things.
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** Elves are the oldest race around, and ''most'' elves will admit the reason that they're better than everybody is because they had been there, done that, and survived to wear the T-shirt out long ago ... and everybody knows it. Either Kate and George know Avaril is normal for elves willing to go adventuring--and they do want to benefit from the lessons the elves learned--or are aware that, actually, Avaril is [[BlueAndOrangeMorality by elven standards]] treating them like fellow elves.
** Elvesjust only recently made FirstContact with other races a little while ago.sapient races. Avaril isn't prepared for the comparative BlueAndOrangeMorality of his human companions, so of course he thinks poorly of them compared to the only culture he's known for most of his life. Kate and George let it go because they know that Avaril [[UndyingLoyalty would die for them if need be]] and he doesn't ''actually'' think that humans are weak, just bizarre, and he'll eventually get over it when he gets more used to elven culture not being the only way to do things.
** Elves
** Avaril likes to tell the humans George and Kate YouAreBetterThanYouThinkYouAre.
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** Avaril is the only elf to mock humans like this, but he's treated as the OnlySaneMan among his kind for it despite being mostly wrong.
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** Avaril is the only elf to mock humans like this, but he's treated as the OnlySaneMan among his kind people for it despite being mostly wrong.
** Every time Avaril calls out human ineptitude, Kate experiences ShamefulShrinking. He criticises humans so often and so harshly that by the end of the story, she's smaller than a flea.
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* '''Enforced''': Avaril and the elf society is constructed as a {{utopia}} reflecting the author's beliefs and ideal view of the world; as such, the author has all the non-{{Straw Character}}s bow down to the elf viewpoint because the author thinks the elves are entirely right and as such should naturally be agreed with.
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* '''Enforced''': Avaril and the elf society is constructed as a {{utopia}} reflecting the author's beliefs and ideal view of the world; as such, the author has all the non-{{Straw Character}}s bow down to the elf viewpoint because the author thinks they think the elves are entirely right and as such should naturally be agreed with.
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** Elf society is hated and feared among 'lesser' races for its arrogance, self-righteousness and elitist viewpoints, but because of their tremendous powers and abilities, the other races prefer to live in quiet resentment rather than calling the elves out and risking retribution. However, when the elves ''do'' face a threat that they cannot face alone, their habit of burning bridges comes back to bite them when none of their 'allies' is particularly willing to come to their aid: [[ScrewYouElves "If you're so superior, you can take care of this yourselves."]]
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** Elf society is hated and feared among All the 'lesser' races hate elf society for its arrogance, self-righteousness and elitist viewpoints, but because of their tremendous powers and abilities, the other races prefer to live in quiet resentment rather than calling the elves out and risking retribution. However, when the elves ''do'' face a threat that they cannot face alone, their habit of burning bridges comes back to bite them when none of their 'allies' is particularly willing to come to their aid: [[ScrewYouElves "If you're so superior, you can take care of this yourselves."]]
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--> '''Senko''': Avaril-san... While you may consider you and your fellow elves as higher, that is debatable. What is not, however, is the fact that ogres, like myself, are merely but brutes that lack a culture at best and are practically animals at worst. I have to object on that. If you bother to get out of your comfort zone, and actually start traveling the world, you will find so much wonderful cultures, especially if you follow me back home. We Oni have something I have never found in people for most of my travels: Humility. I have found most of the people I met on my travels, ''especially you, Avaril,'' to always boast about their achievements and put others down. While you claim that you elves have the alleged "Cream of Society", you should at least visit my society and see for yourself. To conclude: Please stop acting haughty and ignorant. There is so much more to even the most "shallow" races you have seen.
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* '''Reconstructed''': For all his obnoxious self-righteousness, Avaril is genuinely concerned about the plight of the other races, knowing that his own race did not become supremely awesome overnight. He's trying to impart wisdom brought from hard-won experience, and elven society has a kind of [[BrutalHonesty bluntness]] such that he would talk in the same manner to another elf if they were acting out of line. His delivery may annoy his allies, but he brings up enough good points that they know he means well, even if it comes across as a YouAreACreditToYourRace style of patronizing.
** His Kansai dialect speaking sister [[TheIdiotFromOsaka Akira]] tells this to the elves while also {{Flipping the bird}}s:
--> '''Akira''': Yeah, an' y'all can go fuck yerselves with 'em thunderbolts an' shit too!
--> '''Senko''': [[OhCrap Akira nee-san, no, stop!]] Argh... [[ThisIsGonnaSuck It was worth an attempt...]]
--> '''Avaril''': [[DeadpanSnarker And here I thought Oni were supposed to be smart...]]
** His Kansai dialect speaking sister [[TheIdiotFromOsaka Akira]] tells this to the elves while also {{Flipping the bird}}s:
--> '''Akira''': Yeah, an' y'all can go fuck yerselves with 'em thunderbolts an' shit too!
--> '''Senko''': [[OhCrap Akira nee-san, no, stop!]] Argh... [[ThisIsGonnaSuck It was worth an attempt...]]
--> '''Avaril''': [[DeadpanSnarker And here I thought Oni were supposed to be smart...]]
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* '''Reconstructed''': '''Reconstructed''':
** For all his obnoxious self-righteousness, Avaril is genuinely concerned about the plight of the other races, knowing that his own race did not become supremely awesome overnight. He's trying to impart wisdom brought from hard-won experience, and elven society has a kind of [[BrutalHonesty bluntness]] such that he would talk in the same manner to another elf if they were acting out of line. His delivery may annoy his allies, but he brings up enough good points that they know he means well, even if it comes across as a YouAreACreditToYourRace style of patronizing.
** His Kansaidialect speaking dialect-speaking sister [[TheIdiotFromOsaka Akira]] tells this to the elves while also {{Flipping the bird}}s:
--> '''Akira''': --->'''Akira''': Yeah, an' y'all can go fuck yerselves with 'em thunderbolts an' shit too!
--> '''Senko''': --->'''Senko''': [[OhCrap Akira nee-san, no, stop!]] Argh... [[ThisIsGonnaSuck It was worth an attempt...]]
--> '''Avaril''': --->'''Avaril''': [[DeadpanSnarker And here I thought Oni were supposed to be smart...]]
** For all his obnoxious self-righteousness, Avaril is genuinely concerned about the plight of the other races, knowing that his own race did not become supremely awesome overnight. He's trying to impart wisdom brought from hard-won experience, and elven society has a kind of [[BrutalHonesty bluntness]] such that he would talk in the same manner to another elf if they were acting out of line. His delivery may annoy his allies, but he brings up enough good points that they know he means well, even if it comes across as a YouAreACreditToYourRace style of patronizing.
** His Kansai
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-> Akira: Yeah, an' y'all can go fuck yerselves with 'em thunderbolts an' shit too!
-> Senko: [[ThisIsGonnaSuck It was worth an attempt...]]
-> Avaril: [[DeadpanSnarker And here I thought Oni were supposed to be smart...]]
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-> Senko: Avaril-san... While you may consider you and your fellow elves as higher, that is debatable. What is not, however, is the fact that ogres, like myself, are merely but brutes that lack a culture at best and are practically animals at worst. I have to object on that. If you bother to get out of your comfort zone, and actually start traveling the world, you will find so much wonderful cultures, especially if you follow me back home. We Oni have something I have never found in people for most of my travels: Humility. I have found most of the people I met on my travels, ''especially you, Avaril,'' to always boast about their achievements and put others down. While you claim that you elves have the alleged "Cream of Society", you should at least visit my society and see for yourself. To conclude: Please stop acting haughty and ignorant. There is so much more to even the most "shallow" races you have seen.
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*** Otherwise, the keigo-speaking [[{{Oni}} Senko]], [[GeniusBruiser thought to be a brute due to the fact that he's merely an ogre from the east]], manages to give out a cutting yet calm and surprisingly insightful TheReasonYouSuckSpeech, surprising nearly everyone who thought him of a brute with no culture moments prior.
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*** Otherwise, the keigo-speaking [[{{Oni}} Senko]], [[GeniusBruiser [[FormalCharactersUseKeigo keigo-speaking]] {{Oni}} Senko, [[MySpeciesDothProtestTooMuch thought to be a brute due to the fact that he's merely an ogre from the east]], manages to give out a cutting yet calm and surprisingly insightful TheReasonYouSuckSpeech, surprising nearly everyone who thought him of a brute with no culture moments prior.
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*** Otherwise, the {{Keigo}} speaking [[{{Oni}} Senko]], [[GeniusBruiser thought to be a brute due to the fact that he's merely an ogre from the east]], manages to give out a cutting yet calm and surprisingly insightful TheReasonYouSuckSpeech, surprising nearly everyone who thought him of a brute with no culture moments prior.
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*** Otherwise, the {{Keigo}} speaking keigo-speaking [[{{Oni}} Senko]], [[GeniusBruiser thought to be a brute due to the fact that he's merely an ogre from the east]], manages to give out a cutting yet calm and surprisingly insightful TheReasonYouSuckSpeech, surprising nearly everyone who thought him of a brute with no culture moments prior.
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** His KansaiRegionalDialect Kansai dialect speaking sister [[TheIdiotFromOsaka Akira]] tells this to the elves while also {{Flipping the bird}}s:
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*** Otherwise, the {{Keigo}} speaking [[{{Oni}} Senko]], [[GeniusBruiser thought to be a brute due to the fact that he's merely an ogre from the east]], manages to give out a cutting yet calm and surprisingly insightful TheReasonYouSuckSpeech, surprising nearly everyone who thought him of a mindless brute moments prior.
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*** Otherwise, the {{Keigo}} speaking [[{{Oni}} Senko]], [[GeniusBruiser thought to be a brute due to the fact that he's merely an ogre from the east]], manages to give out a cutting yet calm and surprisingly insightful TheReasonYouSuckSpeech, surprising nearly everyone who thought him of a mindless brute with no culture moments prior.prior.
-> Senko: Avaril-san... While you may consider you and your fellow elves as higher, that is debatable. What is not, however, is the fact that ogres, like myself, are merely but brutes that lack a culture at best and are practically animals at worst. I have to object on that. If you bother to get out of your comfort zone, and actually start traveling the world, you will find so much wonderful cultures, especially if you follow me back home. We Oni have something I have never found in people for most of my travels: Humility. I have found most of the people I met on my travels, ''especially you, Avaril,'' to always boast about their achievements and put others down. While you claim that you elves have the alleged "Cream of Society", you should at least visit my society and see for yourself. To conclude: Please stop acting haughty and ignorant. There is so much more to even the most "shallow" races you have seen.
-> Senko: Avaril-san... While you may consider you and your fellow elves as higher, that is debatable. What is not, however, is the fact that ogres, like myself, are merely but brutes that lack a culture at best and are practically animals at worst. I have to object on that. If you bother to get out of your comfort zone, and actually start traveling the world, you will find so much wonderful cultures, especially if you follow me back home. We Oni have something I have never found in people for most of my travels: Humility. I have found most of the people I met on my travels, ''especially you, Avaril,'' to always boast about their achievements and put others down. While you claim that you elves have the alleged "Cream of Society", you should at least visit my society and see for yourself. To conclude: Please stop acting haughty and ignorant. There is so much more to even the most "shallow" races you have seen.
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* '''Enforced''': Avaril and the elf society is constructed as a MarySuetopia {{utopia}} reflecting the author's beliefs and ideal view of the world; as such, the author has all the non-{{Straw Character}}s bow down to the elf viewpoint because the author thinks the elves are entirely right and as such should naturally be agreed with.
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-> Akira: Yeah, an' y'can go fuck yerselves with 'em arrows too!
-> Senko: [[ThisIsGonnaSuck Akira, please quiet down. You have embarrassed us all Oni because of your arrogance]].
-> Senko: [[ThisIsGonnaSuck Akira, please quiet down. You have embarrassed us all Oni because of your arrogance]].
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-> Akira: Yeah, an' y'can y'all can go fuck yerselves with 'em arrows an' shit too!
-> Senko: [[ThisIsGonnaSuckAkira, please quiet down. You have embarrassed us all Oni because of your arrogance]]. It was worth an attempt...]]
-> Senko: [[ThisIsGonnaSuck