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I removed an outdated thing, fixed a couple grammar mistakes (although I've made some too), and tried to make this more concise. (Granted, I'm still trying to make my writing more concise.)
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The {{token minority}} of the cast is always the first to go.
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The {{token minority}} of the cast cast's TokenMinority is always the first to go.
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Misleading.
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African, Caribbean, or Haitian ethnicity = first death.
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African ethnicity = an early death.
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African or other non-white ethnicity = an early death.
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African or other non-white ethnicity = an early death.
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African ethnicity = an early death.
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African or other non-white ethnicity = an early death.
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