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* Judy's emotionless line of "Raaay..." as Ray comes onscreen from out of nowhere.
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* Judy's emotionless line of "Raaay..." as Ray comes onscreen from out of nowhere. And their reaction to hearing one of their children is very likely to have died is to slightly open their eyes in surprise for a brief moment.
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* The [[{{Narm}} excessively narmy]] voice acting at some points is incredibly funny, and makes serious moments be difficult to take seriously; even Lily's DisneyDeath is considered ridiculous when the children sound like they don't care. In fact, her friend continues calling for her like he's trying to politely get her attention. You know, instead of screaming and wailing her name in the hope that she's still alive.
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* The [[{{Narm}} excessively narmy]] voice acting at some points is incredibly funny, and makes serious moments be difficult to take seriously; even Lily's DisneyDeath is considered ridiculous when the children sound like they don't care. In fact, her friend brother continues calling for her like he's trying to politely get her attention. You know, instead of screaming and wailing her name in the hope that she's still alive.
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* "We come from the mayor's." Said in the most flat, nasal voice that could come out of a human being.
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* "We "We've come from the mayor's." Said in the most flat, nasal voice that could come out of a human being.
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** Additionally, the narrator's rather unconvincing-sounding, repeated insistence that Mrs. Mavilda is "going to be alright" and is "good now," trying but arguably failing to sound enthused when he states that she became Judy's assistant (with his "from what I heard..." also suggesting that he is personally unsure about whether that was her actual fate or not).
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** Additionally, the narrator's rather unconvincing-sounding, repeated insistence that Mrs. Mavilda is "going to be alright" all right" and is "good now," trying but arguably failing to sound enthused when he states that she became Judy's assistant (with his "from what I heard..." also suggesting that he is personally unsure about whether that was her actual fate or not).
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** Additionally, the narrator's rather unconvincing-sounding, repeated insistence that Mrs. Mavilda is "going to be alright," trying but arguably failing to sound enthused when he states that she became Judy's assistant (with his "from what I heard..." also suggesting that he is personally unsure about whether that was her actual fate or not).
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** Additionally, the narrator's rather unconvincing-sounding, repeated insistence that Mrs. Mavilda is "going to be alright," alright" and is "good now," trying but arguably failing to sound enthused when he states that she became Judy's assistant (with his "from what I heard..." also suggesting that he is personally unsure about whether that was her actual fate or not).
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** Additionally, the narrator's rather unconvincing-sounding, repeated insistence that Mrs. Mavilda is "going to be alright," trying but arguably failing to sound enthused when he states that she became Judy's assistant (with his "from what I heard..." also suggesting that he is unsure about whether that was her actual fate or not).
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** Additionally, the narrator's rather unconvincing-sounding, repeated insistence that Mrs. Mavilda is "going to be alright," trying but arguably failing to sound enthused when he states that she became Judy's assistant (with his "from what I heard..." also suggesting that he is personally unsure about whether that was her actual fate or not).
