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--> '''Max:''' Hey, blimpo... too many Twinkies. Oink Oink!
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--> '''Max:''' Hey, blimpo...Blimpo... too many Twinkies. Oink Oink!
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"It's" is a contraction of "it is" or "it has". It is not interchangeable with "its", a possessive determiner. Also fixing indentation errors.
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* David trying to hit a switch on the navigator seat and accidentally mashing down on the Puckmarin. It's "WTF!?" reaction says it all.
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* David trying to hit a switch on the navigator seat and accidentally mashing down on the Puckmarin. It's Its "WTF!?" reaction says it all.
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--> '''Max:''' You requested this distance.
--> '''David:''' I didn't mean straight up, I meant along the ground!
--> '''Max:''' [[DullSurprise ...oh.]]
--> '''David:''' I didn't mean straight up, I meant along the ground!
--> '''Max:''' [[DullSurprise ...oh.]]
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** How about the fact that when Big Al sees Max and David pull into his shop, he stops dead in his tracks and stares. He doesn't move an inch or stop looking, not even when he hands David some change or some tourists check out the ship. Only when the duo take off again does he speak.
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* The NASA goons at David's house gleefully watching ''Series/ThePriceIsRight''.
--> The short lived evening version of the Price Is Right starring Tom Kennedy with Johnny Olson announcing right before he died.
--> The short lived evening version of the Price Is Right starring Tom Kennedy with Johnny Olson announcing right before he died.
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* The NASA goons at David's house gleefully watching ''Series/ThePriceIsRight''. \n--> The short lived [[note]] Namely, the short-lived evening version of the Price Is Right starring hosted by Tom Kennedy with that provided Johnny Olson Olson's final announcing right gig before he died.his death.[[/note]]
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* Jeff jumps down from the trees and scares David. While Jeff ''was'' being a little creep, you can help but find it hilarious.
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* Jeff jumps down from the trees and scares David. While Jeff ''was'' being a little creep, you can can't help but find it hilarious.
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** A moment before David heard trees rustling and says "Get back Jeff, I've got a gun!"
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** A moment before David heard trees rustling and says says, "Get back Jeff, I've got a gun!"
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* When Max tells David the ship should preform a particular maneuver in order to escape the NASA goons.
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* When Max tells David the ship should preform perform a particular maneuver in order to escape the NASA goons.
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'''Max:''' I do not leak. You leak, remember?
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'''Max:''' Navigator, I do not leak. You leak, remember?
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* The "[[SugarWiki/AwesomeMusic I Get Around]]" scene, Max and the Puckmarin dance really well.
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* The "[[SugarWiki/AwesomeMusic I Get Around]]" scene, Max and the Puckmarin dance really rather well.
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* Jeff jumps down from the trees and scares David. While Jeff ''was'' being a little creep, you can help but laugh at that moment.
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* Jeff jumps down from the trees and scares David. While Jeff ''was'' being a little creep, you can help but laugh at that moment.find it hilarious.
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'''David:''' I'll kill you! ''(runs after him until he heard Bruiser bark)''
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'''David:''' I'll kill you! ''(runs after him until he heard hears Bruiser bark)''
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* David's brother jumps down from the trees and scares David. While Jeff ''was'' being a little creep, you can help but laugh at that moment.
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* David's brother Jeff jumps down from the trees and scares David. While Jeff ''was'' being a little creep, you can help but laugh at that moment.
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* "Does this leak?" "I don't not leak. You leak, remember?"
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-->'''David:''' Does this thing leak?\\
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-->'''David:''' ''(checking the window)'' Does this thing leak?\\
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* David's brother jumps down from the trees and scares David. While Jeff ''was'' a little creep, you can help but laugh.
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* David's brother jumps down from the trees and scares David. While Jeff ''was'' being a little creep, you can help but laugh.laugh at that moment.
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** A moment before David heard trees rustling and says "Get back Jeff, I've got a gun!"
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* David's brother jumps down from the trees and scares David.
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* David's brother jumps down from the trees and scares David. While Jeff ''was'' a little creep, you can help but laugh.
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--> '''Max:''' [[FlatSurprise ...oh.]]
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--> '''Max:''' [[FlatSurprise ...[[DullSurprise ...oh.]]
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** Later:
--> '''Max:''' You requested this distance.
--> '''David:''' I didn't mean straight up, I meant along the ground!
--> '''Max:''' [[FlatSurprise ...oh.]]
--> '''Max:''' You requested this distance.
--> '''David:''' I didn't mean straight up, I meant along the ground!
--> '''Max:''' [[FlatSurprise ...oh.]]
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* The "[[AwesomeMusic I Get Around]]" scene, Max and the Puckmarin dance really well.
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* The "[[AwesomeMusic "[[SugarWiki/AwesomeMusic I Get Around]]" scene, Max and the Puckmarin dance really well.
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* David's brother jumps out and scares David.
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* David's brother jumps out down from the trees and scares David.
