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* TheDreaded: Lancer has recently become this to everyone but Rider. While she herself is actually a rather sub par Servant her ability to transform into [[spoiler:[[TheJuggernaut Zeruel]]]] will cause both [[{{Gamebreaker}} Berserker]] and [[{{Gamebreaker}} Avenger]] to retreat without question.
* DyingCurse: Wow [[spoiler:Caster!]] Taking a page from [[spoiler:[[FateZero Zero Lancer]]]] this is in [[spoiler:her]] own words:
-->"I-Is there a level any of you will not sink to? Kidnapping, hidden agendas, back-stabbing...'''DO ANY OF YOU HAVE ANY SHAME!?''' I won't… I won't forgive any of you for this! All of you are selfish monsters, fighting for your own reasons and not for others! You only reach for the Grail for your own selfish desires, hoping to achieve something to bring peace towards yourself and not for others! You denied me from [[spoiler:[[TragicDream protecting my Guild… my family…!]]]] I-I hope that the Grail is cursed! That your wish will '''''ruin''''' you! '''YOU WILL REMEMBER [[spoiler:FAIRY TAIL]] WHEN YOUR LIVES FALL TO RUIN!'''"

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* TheDreaded: Lancer has recently become this to everyone but Rider. While she herself is actually a rather sub-par Servant, her ability to transform into [[spoiler:[[TheJuggernaut Zeruel]]]] will cause both [[GameBreaker Berserker]] and [[GameBreaker Avenger]] to retreat without question.
* DyingCurse: Wow, [[spoiler:Caster!]] Taking a page from [[spoiler:[[FateZero Zero Lancer]]]], this is in [[spoiler:her]] own words:
-->"I-Is there a level any of you will not sink to? Kidnapping, hidden agendas, back-stabbing... '''DO ANY OF YOU HAVE ANY SHAME!?''' I won't… I won't forgive any of you for this! All of you are selfish monsters, fighting for your own reasons and not for others! You only reach for the Grail for your own selfish desires, hoping to achieve something to bring peace towards yourself and not for others! You denied me from [[spoiler:[[TragicDream protecting my Guild… my family…!]]]] I-I hope that the Grail is cursed! That your wish will '''''ruin''''' you! '''YOU WILL REMEMBER [[spoiler:FAIRY TAIL]] WHEN YOUR LIVES FALL TO RUIN!'''"

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* IdiotHero: Deconstructed with Caster/[[spoiler:Erza]]. Because she comes from such an idealistic setting she easily falls for Kirei's rather flimsy con thinking everything will magically turn out okay like it does in her home universe.
* {{Irony}}:[[spoiler: The servant Berserker somewhat killed not too long ago, Lancer, is the servant Illya is afraid of the most.]]
** The Fourth Wars' Caster was a horrible hypocritical monster but died realizing how much of a monster he had become and gained a degree of atonement as he [[FaceDeathWithDignity Faced Death With Dignity]]. The Fifth Wars [[spoiler:Caster]] was a noble, upstanding knight and died hating and cursing the world blaming people for things they didn't do like the Fourth Wars Caster used to do.
** In canon Sakura summoned a good version of Medusa who's life was ruined by circumstances outside of her control. In this story Sakura summons a Heroic Spirit who's life was ruined by a witch ''named'' Medusa.
** In the Fourth War the Assassin was Saber's ArchEnemy and she hated him but she has come to respect the Fifth War's Assassin and forms a powerful ActionDuo with him.

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* IdiotHero: Deconstructed with Caster/[[spoiler:Erza]]. Because she comes from such an idealistic setting, she easily falls for Kirei's rather flimsy con, thinking everything will magically turn out okay like it does in her home universe.
* {{Irony}}: [[spoiler: The Servant that Berserker somewhat killed not too long ago, Lancer, is the servant Illya is afraid of the most.]]
** The Fourth War's Caster was a horrible hypocritical monster but died realizing how much of a monster he had become and gained a degree of atonement as he [[FaceDeathWithDignity Faced Death With Dignity]]. The Fifth War's [[spoiler:Caster]] was a noble, upstanding knight and died hating and cursing the world, blaming people for things they didn't do like the Fourth War's Caster used to do.
** In canon, Sakura summoned a good version of Medusa whose life had been ruined by circumstances outside of her control. In this story, Sakura summons a Heroic Spirit whose life was ruined by a witch ''named'' Medusa.
** In the Fourth War, the Assassin was Saber's ArchEnemy and she hated him, but has come to respect the Fifth War's Assassin and forms a powerful ActionDuo with him.

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* OhCrap: Lancer/[[spoiler: Rei]] had her CrowningMomentOfAwesome when she transformed in [[spoiler: the Rebuild version of Zeruel]] and caused this to [[spoiler:''[[PhysicalGod Simon the Digger]]'']].
** MassOhCrap: ''Everyone'' nearly pissed themselves in fear when Lancer brought out [[spoiler:[[TheJuggernaut Zeruel]].]]
* OmniscientMoralityLicense: While Kirei is most definitely NOT a hero. No one will ever suspects him of being evil until the time is right. No matter how weird and blatantly evil he acts or how many times he breaks the FourthWall in front of people. But this is justified because [[spoiler: he works for the author who uses his powers to protect him.]]
* OneSteveLimit: Averted with [[spoiler: Shinji Ikari and Shinji Matou]]
** [[DoubleSubversion Double subverted.]] [[spoiler:Matou is unceremonuosly killed by Kirei and Deadpool in half-assed attempt to frame Caster.]] Oh, wait, [[spoiler:It's not half assed anymore. It's so ''[[CrowningMomentOfAwesome brilliant]]'' and ''[[KickTheDog sadistic]]'' at the same time. Did TIM takes the [[{{Awesome/Bleach}} "DIE YOU AIZ- Oh, wait, sorry, Momo,"]] scene into heart?]]

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* OhCrap: Lancer/[[spoiler: Rei]] has her CrowningMomentOfAwesome when she transforms into [[spoiler: the Rebuild version of Zeruel]] and causes [[spoiler:''[[PhysicalGod Simon the Digger]]'']] to utter this.
** MassOhCrap: ''Everyone'' nearly pisses themselves in fear when Lancer brings out [[spoiler:[[TheJuggernaut Zeruel]].]]
* OmniscientMoralityLicense: While Kirei is most definitely NOT a hero, no one will ever suspects him of being evil until the time is right. No matter how weird and blatantly evil he acts or how many times he breaks the FourthWall in front of people. But this is justified because [[spoiler: he works for the author who uses his powers to protect him.]]
* OneSteveLimit: Averted with [[spoiler: Shinji Ikari and Shinji Matou]].
** [[DoubleSubversion Double subverted.]] [[spoiler:Matou is unceremonuosly killed by Kirei and Deadpool in a half-assed attempt to frame Caster.]] Oh, wait, [[spoiler:It's not half-assed anymore. It's ''[[CrowningMomentOfAwesome brilliant]]'' and ''[[KickTheDog sadistic]]'' at the same time. Did TIM takes the [[{{Awesome/Bleach}} "DIE YOU AIZ- Oh, wait, sorry, Momo,"]] scene into heart?]]

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* RyuAndKen: Shinji and [[spoiler:Rei]] have very similar abilities as Servants but Shinji has better stats and Personal Skills while [[spoiler:Rei]] has better Noble Phantasms, [[spoiler: mainly, she has three extra lives and the ability to summon [[TheJuggernaut Zeruel.]]]] Even more so when [[spoiler:Rei is from the RebuildOfEvangelion continuity]] and Shinji is from [[NeonGenesisEvangelion the original series]].
* SerialEscalation: In the first fic Waver summons [[MemeticBadass Kamina]] as Rider. [[spoiler: In the sequel he summons [[PhysicalGod Simon t]][[GameBreaker he Digger.]]]]
** Lancer Shinji could summon [[spoiler: Unit 01]]. Lancer [[spoiler: Rei]] can become [[spoiler: the Zeruel/Rei fusion]].
* SanitySlippage: Sakura justifiably undergoes this during her BreakingLecture to Aoi and Rin as she remembers Zouken's "[[MoralEventHorizon training.]]".
* SeriousBusiness: Kirei consider's it ''very'' SeriousBusiness to find out how many times Kenny has been killed in WesternAnimation/SouthPark.

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* RyuAndKen: Shinji and [[spoiler:Rei]] have very similar abilities as Servants, but Shinji has better stats and Personal Skills while [[spoiler:Rei]] has better Noble Phantasms, [[spoiler: mainly, she has three extra lives and the ability to summon [[TheJuggernaut Zeruel.]]]] Even more so when [[spoiler:Rei is from the RebuildOfEvangelion continuity]] and Shinji is from [[NeonGenesisEvangelion the original series]].
* SerialEscalation: In the first fic, Waver summons [[MemeticBadass Kamina]] as Rider. [[spoiler: In the sequel, he summons [[PhysicalGod Simon t]][[GameBreaker he Digger.]]]]
** Lancer!Shinji could summon [[spoiler: Unit 01]]. Lancer![[spoiler: Rei]] can become [[spoiler: the Zeruel/Rei fusion]].
* SanitySlippage: Sakura justifiably undergoes this during her BreakingLecture to Aoi and Rin as she remembers Zouken's "[[MoralEventHorizon training]]".
* SeriousBusiness: Kirei considers it ''very'' SeriousBusiness to find out how many times Kenny has been killed in WesternAnimation/SouthPark.

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** Avenger also reassures himself that [[spoiler:Waver]] couldn't possibly provide enough prana for [[spoiler:Rider to summon Tengen Toppa Gurren Lagann]]. He's forgetting that [[spoiler:Team Dai-Gurren's motto is to kick reason to the curb and go beyond the impossible]].
* UnstoppableRage: Shinji loses it when he see's [[spoiler:Zeruel]] and immediately summons Unit-01 and almost beats it to death in rage and revenge for what it did to him and his friends in his homeworld only stopping when he learns [[spoiler:that it is really Rei ''transformed'' into Zeruel, leading to a MyGodWhatHaveIDone moment.]]
* WhamEpisode: While things started getting serious before Chapter 15, when that chapter came it solidified '''HARD'''. [[spoiler:How hard? If the first servant killed in the war '''DECLARES A {{DYING CURSE}} ON THE GRAIL''' [[FromBadToWorse it is all downhill from there]].]]
* WhatCouldHaveBeen: Furthers the tradition of small omakes of could-have-been servants with [[spoiler: BOTH [[SamuraiChamploo Jin and Mugen]]]] as Assassin, [[spoiler: [[DragonBallAbridged Abridged!Mr. Popo]]]] as Caster, [[spoiler:[[SoulEater Death the Kid]]]] as Archer, [[spoiler:[[Manga/{{Bleach}} Madarame Ikkaku]]]] as Lancer, [[spoiler:[[AsurasWrath Asura]]]] as Berserker, [[spoiler:[[CowboyBebop Spike Spiegel]]]] as Rider, and [[spoiler:ThePunisher]] as Avenger.

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** Avenger also reassures himself that [[spoiler:Waver]] couldn't possibly provide enough prana for [[spoiler:Rider to summon Tengen Toppa Gurren Lagann]]. He's forgetting that [[spoiler:Team Dai-Gurren's motto is to go beyond the impossible and kick reason to the curb.]]
* UnstoppableRage: Shinji loses it when he sees [[spoiler:Zeruel]] and immediately summons Unit-01 and almost beats it to death in rage and revenge for what it did to him and his friends in his homeworld, only stopping when he learns [[spoiler:that it is really Rei ''transformed'' into Zeruel, leading to a MyGodWhatHaveIDone moment.]]
* WhamEpisode: While things started getting serious before Chapter 15, when that chapter came it solidified '''HARD'''. [[spoiler:How hard? If the first Servant killed in the war '''DECLARES A {{DYING CURSE}} ON THE GRAIL''', [[FromBadToWorse it's all downhill from there]].]]
* WhatCouldHaveBeen: Furthers the tradition of small omakes of could-have-been Servants with [[spoiler: BOTH [[SamuraiChamploo Jin and Mugen]]]] as Assassin, [[spoiler: [[DragonBallAbridged Abridged!Mr. Popo]]]] as Caster, [[spoiler:[[SoulEater Death the Kid]]]] as Archer, [[spoiler:[[Manga/{{Bleach}} Madarame Ikkaku]]]] as Lancer, [[spoiler:[[AsurasWrath Asura]]]] as Berserker, [[spoiler:[[CowboyBebop Spike Spiegel]]]] as Rider, and [[spoiler:ThePunisher]] as Avenger.

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---> Kirei: I'm fucking evil.
* CasanovaWannabe: Archer has the habit to hit on every adult female character he meets, including Maiya, Irisviel, and even ''Saber'' (though it required him to be drunk for the latter). He usually gets rejected (though Iri did blushes).
* CerebusSyndrome: The fic takes a very dark turn with the [[spoiler: death of Caster at the hands of Berserker]] in chapter eleven. Not the [[spoiler:Caster and Uryuu]] [[KickTheSonOfABitch didn't deserve it.]] But their deaths begin the darkening of the plot. 
* CoolVsAwesome: A regular occurance. Starting in this order. {{Deadpool}} almost defeating Saber ''with Monty Python References'', [[GurrenLagann Gurren Lagann]] vs [[NeonGenesisEvangelion Eva Unit-01]], Sasuke's [[{{Naruto}} Susanoo]] vs Grimmjow's [[Manga/{{Bleach}} Gran Rey Cero]], ''more Monty Python references'', Vash's [[{{Trigun}} Angel Arm]] vs Saber's Excalibur [[spoiler: Angel Arm wins]], ''Grimmjow in Resurrecion vs ALL OF TEAM DAI-GURREN'', Gurren Lagann vs Eva Unit-01 rematch. Gurren Lagann wins [[spoiler: although Rider dies from his wounds.]] And finally MORE MONTY PYTHON REFERENCES. The HolyShitQuotient was surpassed at the first Monty Python reference. [[CrazyAwesome Yeah, it's that kind of fic.]]
* ChekhovsGun: [[spoiler: Kamina's nodachi, used as Waver's second catalyst when he joins in the sequel's war. He was hoping to summon Kamina again, but he got the next best thing; Simon the Digger.]]

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--> Kirei: I'm fucking evil.
* CasanovaWannabe: Archer has the habit to hit on every adult female character he meets, including Maiya, Irisviel, and even ''Saber'' (though it required him to be drunk for the latter). He usually gets rejected (though Iri did blush).
* CerebusSyndrome: The fic takes a very dark turn with the [[spoiler: death of Caster at the hands of Berserker]] in chapter eleven. Not that [[spoiler:Caster and Uryuu]] [[KickTheSonOfABitch didn't deserve it]], but their deaths do begin the darkening of the plot. 
* CoolVsAwesome: A regular occurance. Starting in this order. {{Deadpool}} almost defeating Saber ''with Monty Python References'', [[GurrenLagann Gurren Lagann]] vs [[NeonGenesisEvangelion Eva Unit-01]], Sasuke's [[{{Naruto}} Susano'o]] vs Grimmjow's [[Manga/{{Bleach}} Gran Rey Cero]], ''more Monty Python references'', Vash's [[{{Trigun}} Angel Arm]] vs Saber's Excalibur [[spoiler: Angel Arm wins]], ''Grimmjow in Resurrecion vs ALL OF TEAM DAI-GURREN'', Gurren Lagann vs Eva Unit-01 rematch. Gurren Lagann wins [[spoiler: although Rider dies from his wounds.]] And finally, MORE MONTY PYTHON REFERENCES. The HolyShitQuotient was surpassed at the first Monty Python reference. [[CrazyAwesome Yeah, it's that kind of fic.]]
* ChekhovsGun: [[spoiler: Kamina's nodachi, used as Waver's second catalyst when he joins in the sequel's war. He was hoping to summon Kamina again, but he got the next best thing: Simon the Digger.]]

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* FanService: at one point, Maiya attempt to ambush Archer, only to fail to even get his attention, since he is only concerned with the fact she wrecked his dognuth. Eventually, while leaving, he mentions he could have groped her at least five time during the whole conversation. Then immediatly proceed to do so by opening her shirt without her even noticing, then squeezing her breast exactly five times.
* FauxAffablyEvil: Kotomine [[spoiler: after he becomes aware to the fourth wall.]]
** Considering that he helps [[spoiler:provide fake identity to Sola-Ui and survived Lancer, and helps provide means to... ''exterminate'' Zouken]], you could say that he enters AffablyEvil territory [[spoiler:with Deadpool]]
* FreakOut: Kotomine when [[spoiler: he realizes he's a fictional character in a fanfic. Cue RageAgainstTheAuthor, that of course, fails.]]
* HilarityEnsues: Much of the first half of the story is simply comedy from the servants interacting with their masters.
* [[spoiler:ILetYouWin[=/=]IDieFree: Vash has defeated Saber but because Kotomine tries to force him to betray his [[ThouShallNotKill code]] he asks her to kill him before he does so and resists having '''two''' command seals on this order. After she deals the final blow Vash dies with peace of mind.]]

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* FanService: at one point, Maiya attempt to ambush Archer, only to fail to even get his attention, since he is only concerned with the fact she wrecked his doughnut. Eventually, while leaving, he mentions he could have groped her at least five times during the whole conversation. Then immediatly proceed to do so by opening her shirt without her even noticing, then squeezing her breast exactly five times.
* FauxAffablyEvil: Kotomine [[spoiler: after he becomes aware to the Fourth Wall.]]
** Considering that he helps [[spoiler:provide a fake identity to Sola-Ui and survived Lancer, and helps provide means to... ''exterminate'' Zouken]], you could say that he enters AffablyEvil territory [[spoiler:with Deadpool]].
* FreakOut: Kotomine when [[spoiler: he realizes he's a fictional character in a fanfic. Cue RageAgainstTheAuthor, which of course fails.]]
* HilarityEnsues: Much of the first half of the story is simply comedy from the Servants interacting with their Masters.
* [[spoiler:ILetYouWin[=/=]IDieFree: Vash has defeated Saber, but because Kotomine tries to force him to betray his [[ThouShallNotKill code]] he asks her to kill him before he does so and resists having '''two''' command seals on this order. After she deals the final blow, Vash dies with peace of mind.]]

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* TheJuggernaut: Berserker, full stop, to the point were he's considered an in-universe GameBreaker. Archer and Saber can't hurt him. He shrugs off Caster's [[spoiler: Amaterasu]] like it's nothing and punches through his [[spoiler: Susano'o]] like it's made of cardboard. The only thing stopping him from slaughtering everyone but Rider is because Kariya is his Master. Even then it took [[spoiler: all of Team Dai-Gurren and a Giga Drill Breaker to take him down.]] 
* KnightOfCerebus: In the first half of the story, Caster and Uryuu were the main source of drama and nothing about their actions were PlayedForLaughs; all of their murders were played dead straight and whenever they showed up, the laughs stopped. [[spoiler: Ironically, their deaths is what ''started'' the fic's CerebusSyndrome.]]
* LoopholeAbuse: [[TheStoic Kirei]], unable to handle Deadpool's mouth, uses a Command Seal to make him never open his mouth again. {{Deadpool}} gets around this by ripping off his mouth and growing a new one.

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