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* IllGirl: A-17's daughter is bedridden throughout the story due to a not yet understood disease that leaves her bones incredibly brittle.
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* DrivenToMadness: [[spoiler:71.]]
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* MayDecemberRomance: Citizen 83 is 25. Citizen 71 is in his 40s.
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* ApocalypseHow: There is implied to have been a Class 2 catastrophe before the story starts.
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* [[spoiler:OmnicidalManiac: 71. Though he doesn't go through with it.]]
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* SlidingScaleOfIdealismVersusCynicism: Definitely falls on the side of cynicism.
* TheDragon: A-17 is this to Mayor Calvin.
* TheParagonAlwaysRebels: Part of the backstory between Mayor Calvin and Citizen 71.
* TheRevolutionWillNotBeCivilized
* TheRevolutionWillNotBeVillified: At least from 71's perspective.
* OrderVersusChaos
* SlidingScaleOfIdealismVersusCynicism: Definitely falls on the side of cynicism.
* TheDragon: A-17 is this to Mayor Calvin.
* TheParagonAlwaysRebels: Part of the backstory between Mayor Calvin and Citizen 71.
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* BigLippedAlligatorMoment: There is a scene in which The Mayor and A-17 are enjoying a pleasant, patriotic festival in the middle of a terrorist's death threats and overall crapsack setting. The Mayor justifies this by saying that A-17 needs a moment of relaxation.
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* DesignatedHero: 71.
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* CharacterAlignment: From the start, 71 appears to be ChaoticGood, A-17 LawfulGood, and Mayor Calvin LawfulEvil.
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There's just one problem: Citizen 71 is a wanted man. The newly promoted right hand man to Mayor Zero, is specifically tasked with bringing him and his family down. Raising a family in hiding while plotting your opressors' demise, it seems, do not help keep one's sanity in check.
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There's just one problem: Citizen 71 is a wanted man. The newly promoted right hand man to Mayor Zero, Calvin, is specifically tasked with bringing him and his family down. Raising a family in hiding while plotting your opressors' demise, it seems, do not help keep one's sanity in check.
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* BigBad: Mayor Zero is set up as this.
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* BigBad: Mayor Zero Calvin is set up as this.
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* CharacterAlignment: From the start, 71 appears to be ChaoticGood, A-17 LawfulGood, and Mayor Zero LawfulEvil.
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* CharacterDevelopment: A-17 goes from BlackShirt to seriously considering a way to overthrow his boss to his boss' errand boy, just as Mayor Zero wanted. 71 turns from outcast political rival to batshit crazy. The yet unwritten {{Prequel}} will show this character development in more detail.
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* CharacterAlignment: From the start, 71 appears to be ChaoticGood, A-17 LawfulGood, and Mayor Zero Calvin LawfulEvil.
* CharacterDevelopment: A-17 goes from BlackShirt to seriously considering a way to overthrow his boss to his boss' errand boy, just as MayorZero Calvin wanted. 71 turns from outcast political rival to batshit crazy. The yet unwritten {{Prequel}} will show this character development in more detail.
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* TheDragon: A-17 is this to Mayor Zero.
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* TheParagonAlwaysRebels: Part of the backstory between MayorZero Calvin and Citizen 71.
* TheParagonAlwaysRebels: Part of the backstory between Mayor
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Mayor Zero runs Jasper City with a ([[ChurchMilitant religious]]) iron fist. A man known only as Citizen 71 has a problem with this, and hatches a secret plan to get rid of the current establishment. He also manages to convince his family to help him.
There's just one problem: Citizen 71 is a wanted man. One man in particular, the newly promoted right hand man to Mayor Zero, is specifically tasked with bringing him and his family down. Oh, right. 71 and his family are also homeless. Being homeless and on the run while plotting your opressors' demise, it seems, do not help keep one's sanity in check.
Meanwhile, that right hand man? Citizen A-17 is determined to show his loyalty to the Mayor and his ability to do his new job well. While he investigates, however, he starts to have doubts as to whether he's doing the right thing or not. But between an iron-fisted dictator and a terrorist who's slowly slipping into insanity, it's tough to decide which one is really doing the right thing.
There's just one problem: Citizen 71 is a wanted man. One man in particular, the newly promoted right hand man to Mayor Zero, is specifically tasked with bringing him and his family down. Oh, right. 71 and his family are also homeless. Being homeless and on the run while plotting your opressors' demise, it seems, do not help keep one's sanity in check.
Meanwhile, that right hand man? Citizen A-17 is determined to show his loyalty to the Mayor and his ability to do his new job well. While he investigates, however, he starts to have doubts as to whether he's doing the right thing or not. But between an iron-fisted dictator and a terrorist who's slowly slipping into insanity, it's tough to decide which one is really doing the right thing.
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Mayor Zero Calvin runs Jasper City with a ([[ChurchMilitant religious]]) iron fist. A man known only as Citizen 71 has a problem with this, and hatches a secret plan to get rid of the current establishment. He also manages to convince his family to help him.
There's just one problem: Citizen 71 is a wanted man.One man in particular, the The newly promoted right hand man to Mayor Zero, is specifically tasked with bringing him and his family down. Oh, right. 71 and his Raising a family are also homeless. Being homeless and on the run in hiding while plotting your opressors' demise, it seems, do not help keep one's sanity in check.
Meanwhile, that right handman? man Citizen A-17 is determined to show his loyalty to the Mayor and his ability to do his new job well. While But while he investigates, however, he starts to have doubts as to whether he's doing the right thing or not. But between thing. Between an iron-fisted dictator and a terrorist who's slowly slipping into insanity, it's tough to decide which one side is really doing the right thing.
There's just one problem: Citizen 71 is a wanted man.
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* AndIMustScream: Lillian A-17's daughter is quickly headed in this direction, her illness getting so bad that she can't leave her bed and the slightest movements cause severe injury.
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* BlackAndGrayMorality: At the start, the Mayor seems to be the king of puppy kickers, making 71 look good by comparison. Then 71's refusal to reveal the details of his plan casts some doubt on him. His methods include breaking and entering and outright declaring war on the Mayor. Then there's the FINAL part of his plan...
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* BlackAndGrayMorality: At the start, the Mayor seems to be the king of puppy kickers, making 71 look good by comparison. Then 71's refusal to reveal the details of his plan casts some doubt on him. His methods include breaking And when you look into the history between 71 and entering and outright declaring war on the Mayor. Then there's the FINAL part of his plan...Mayor, things get even muddier.
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* DaddysGirl: Dot.
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* CityInABottle: The world outside the city is a wastland, barren apart from a small camp of outsiders.
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* ApocalypseHow: [[spoiler:The end could be a Class 0 to 3a, depending if there is any civilization beyond the city limits. ]]
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* ApocalypseHow: [[spoiler:The end could be a Class 0 to 3a, depending if there is any civilization beyond the city limits. ]]
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* CityInABottle: The world outside the city is never discussed.a wastland, barren apart from a small camp of outsiders.
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* HannibalLecture: 71 gives A-17 this on the one occasion they can speak privately.
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* [[spoiler:OmnicidalManiac: 71. Though he doesn't go through with it.]]
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* CharacterDevelopment: A-17 goes from BlackShirt to seriously considering a way to overthrow his boss to his boss' errand boy, just as Mayor Zero wanted. 71 turns from outcast political rival to batshit crazy. The {{Prequel}} shows this character development in more detail.
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* CharacterDevelopment: A-17 goes from BlackShirt to seriously considering a way to overthrow his boss to his boss' errand boy, just as Mayor Zero wanted. 71 turns from outcast political rival to batshit crazy. The yet unwritten {{Prequel}} shows will show this character development in more detail.
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* AndIMustScream: Lillian is quickly headed in this direction, her illness getting so bad that she can't leave her bed and the slightest movements cause severe injury.